This room is filled with people
Yet I’m all alone
So I sit coldly in the corner
Frozen like a stone
Cold frost tears drip down my cheeks
I can barely stand,
I feel so weak,
You were the life inside my eyes
And the air that filled my lungs
You saw right through my disguise
I can't believe Your gone
Does all we shared mean nothing?
Our love, yet damaged is so strong.
Now that you're gone
Who's supposed to catch me when I fall?
You were always my safe place
My lighthouse in the storm
And in those cold dark nights
Now who will keep me warm?
I know I can't live without you,
And When That day Comes,
Then I’ll say goodbye,
But I know, We will meet again
A contest entry
- don't tell me goodbye. by Sun-shiney.
300 points, ended June 30, 2008, 17 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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Ahh, this was the Bronze trophy you bespoke of!! Nice job with trophies (I love trophies man).
"Frozen like a stone"
Some accidental rhyme huh?
"You were the life inside my eyes
And the air that filled my lungs"
For cliches...this is nicely remixed.
Some technical errors I don't feel like getting into because I'm feeling lazy and poet-ed out...nice trophy once again man (:
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This is absolutely incredible. I loved the wording of this and I must say it flowed very well. You have talent, and that's proven within this poem :]
"This room is filled with people
Yet I’m all alone"
I think we all feel like that sometime, but you really penned it perfectly. I also loved all of the fourth stanza. Great write =] Keep writing<3
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