I held this baby in my stomach
To care for just as me
There's no love in that relationship
I'm alone can't you see
He walked away one day
Walked out and left us here
He didn't think about what would happen
He didn't even care
Nobody understood
That i was left here on my own
To take care of that baby
That would leave me on my own
I cried and tried to kill myself
But I gave up in the end
I fell in love with that baby
but still had a heart to mend
And at eight months I lost it
My beautiful little baby
I'm still not over it
Why can't anyone see
Please tell me what you think
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Sorry to be this way Tiff, but you have lost your mind. Go get some help, please. This is no way to be....
And about little Houdini, he/she/it never existed. The doctors even said that. Why won't you just realize the truth and grow up a bit....
Sorry to be an ass, but this is just depressing. Very much a downer. Cheer the fuck up and stop being emo. I promise you this when I tell you that things will get better, you just have to let them...
Otherwise, your poetry sucks. It has never really been any good, but you are improving. Stick with it and never stop writing. Maybe one day your writings will get better too.
(If you want constructive criticism, here goes. Stop with the end line rhyming and let it flow. Don't force the words together because it just isn't good when you do. Good luck in the future and sorry about your mental issue. I hope that you can get better....) -
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Tifnie I think this poem is beautiful and heart felt. No one could ever understand what you went through until they experience it themself. and as far as the above commenter goes anyone who is a true freind and would not support you through your pain needs to learn to aleast swollow his words and be there when you need to just let it all out.
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