This is the sound of my plummeting heart
Falling down from my heaven
And breaking apart
Burning my happiness
Fading my star
This is the sound of your final goodbye
You tell me I’ve lost you
Despite how I tried
Tell me it’s over
But my love won’t die
I’m lost
(baby without you I’m running blind)
So lost
(baby without you I’m stuck in time)
I’m lost
(Ooh I’m lost without you)
So lost
So lost
So lost
So lost
Tell me the story
Of how we first met
Don’t leave an unspoken line
Even the parts
That we’d rather forget
I want to savor them
I want to go back in time
This is the sound of a gentle hello
You say how you missed me
And want me to know
I tell you the same and
I have scars to show
We’re lost
So lost
Lost
We’re lost
We’re lost
We’re lost
We’re lost
This is the sound of you changing your mind
Returning our dreams and
The sun in our sky
To prove we’re forever
A love for all time
Author notes
This is a re-write of 'Lost' by Annie Lennox, you can hear the song on this link:
http://www.last.fm/music/Annie+Lennox/_/Lost
It should be syllable perfect for the contest, although a couple of things to note:
Firstly, there's a bit where Annie Lennox goes 'ooh' for a few notes in the first chorus so i added words to that. Secondly, she also 'hums' the notes of a verse at the very end of the song so i added words to that as well, hopefully you'll see why when you look at the story of the song.
Hope you like it!
A contest entry
- Lyrical rewrite by BornWithAPen.
3000 points, ended June 26, 2008, 8 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Turn that silver into Gold pt 9 by whispernthedark.
400 points, ended October 18, 2008, 39 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Woot woot
This was really great. i always worry about people and rhyming but you pull it off so smoothly. Annie Lennox would be proud to hear this i think. I love the words you used. It runs together so beautifully. I like this a lot. It was a good song to pick too. -
This was really good it made me sad tho haha
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wow!
this was soooo awsome!! i loved it!! it was enough to send shivers down my spine bein' most of us know what it's like to have experienced something like that...thank you for sharing...hope to see more work by you!!
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I absolutely loved this poem and it gave me such an amazing feeling...
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its a fly rewrite good luck to you in the contest........
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This is a really great re-write. Thank you for entering the contest, good luck.
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whisper
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awesome!!!!!!!! song.....
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Great song. That's so cool that you rewrote that song. I'm glad that you won a silver trophy with it. Good luck in future contests!
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WOW, this was absolutely brilliant, such a beautiful story, well done , so well done
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