1.
Aching voices run through my head
Unheard screams from words resound
Hidden scars; murdered betrayal
Keeping secrets; never good enough
To speak, why do I tremble?
Why do I try?
2.
Blood pumps from closed wounds
Pressing through the sutured lies
Unwanted, unloved, lost
Forgotten teardrops
Candied lies
Death
3.
Wanton looks
Secrets with held
Longing for touches
What can’t be shown?
Loving you
Never the truth
Can never be loved
4.
Stolen kisses
Unknown meaning
Wanting to be alike
Never relishing
The reason likening so much
Is want to touch
5
Thoughts
Always turn
To demise
Of others
Of self
Unknown
Death
Take away
This pain
I want to bleed
I don’t deserve to live
6.
Look into my eyes
Do you see the pain you cause?
But I want that
I want the pain
Because if you didn’t cause pain
Then I wouldn’t believe its love
And if you didn’t tell I existed
I would die
Author notes
Questions asked
2Have you ever been abused in any way?
2Are you secretly suicidal?
3Are you crushing on someone you're not supposed to like?
4Are you an in-the-closet homosexual?
5Do you have a secret obsession with something you don't want anyone to know about?
6Is there something you'd like to say to someone you'd never say out loud?
A contest entry
- Your deepest darkest secret... by AutumnsFlame.
662 points, ended September 1, 2008, 21 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
please tell me what you really think
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As the others have said; to me, I thought parts of this worked VERY well - particularly the opening which was so strong it just reached out and grabbed my attention, and left me wanting more, but, for me [and it might just be me] after that opening, the poem weakened, and as others have said, bringing in so many secrets confused me.
I think I might see where you were going with this, trying to encompass ALL your deepest secrets in together, but, it just didnt work for me. However, best of luck in the contest
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I couldn't tell if you really had these feelings or if it was merely being written for the contest because you write of so many secrets ... best wishes in the contest though.
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eh... I don't know how to feel about this one... it just didn't really GRAB me. I think you should use some imagery or maybe a metaphor of some sort. Yeahhh.... Thank you for entering my contest.
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WOW sweetie this is quite intense.. and very deep. this is very intense poem.. you did a Fantastic job with this.. I can relate to some of these.. some of them are from my past, but the scars are there still..
good luck sweetie..
mommy loves you
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You did a wonderful job hun.. I really loved the imagery and emotion that you put in this.. I've been feeling like this a lot lately so I can relate.. Best of luck hun..
Angel
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This is beautiful and heartfelt, sweetums. I especially love the last stanza...it kind of reminds me of how I've been feeling today...but maybe in a different way.
Poetry that comes straight from the heart is the best there is.
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