It's always hardest to dance
when there is no music...
hanging on to silence
in broken heeled stilettos
and champagne covered
party dresses
we made the fiddlers play our game
late into the night
not knowing that the strings would snap
to sting our jaded hides
swollen and blistered
left cleaning
broken glass off ballroom floors
we crumple, discouraged
onto abandoned wooden thrones
to hold our breath
impatiently
as we wait for the music to come back
A contest entry
- Happiness is only temporary by BellaD.
950 points, ended July 6, 2008, 14 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - BATTLE OF THE GOLDS Freeverse by Swan song.
1300 points, ended January 6, 14 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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we made the fiddlers play our game
late into the night
not know that the strings would snap
to sting our jaded hides
This is really a wonderful poem really good
except the third line of this stanza is does not read complete
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loved the imagery and metaphors in this write. great write and good luck!
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we crumple, discouraged
onto abandoned wooden thrones
to hold our breath
impatiently
as we wait for the music to come back
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This was great. Regarding the other contest, you really took up the title of the contest in a great poem! I thought it was really quite good and showed consequences of action clearly and with beautiful imagery and metaphors.
Congratulations and good luck in the contest.
Chin up,
Swim.x -
Stunning wording and imagery.
in broken heeled stilettos
and champagne covered
party dresses
Love it. Thank you for your entry. -
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Hey. thank you for the first place prize. It was nice to be able to use this piece once again and it fit so well here. Thank again.
Carrie
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I will comment later, but for now a question:
In line 9, did you mean knowing where you have know?
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