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What did i do?

What did i do to feel this pain,
All i wanted was you,
But that makes me truly insane,
You broke my heart in two,

It's like you shoved a knife into my heart,
Cutting it in half with i little incision,
You just tore it all apart,
In a horrid quick decision,

I'm sick of lying to myself,
Saying you'll never hurt me again,
But still I'm lying to myself,
Because thats exactly what you'll intend.




Could you sit through this poem?

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  • hide-n-go-seek-hope
    August 22, 2008

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    this is extremely cutee;
    i think its writen like really well;
    nd i love the words you used.
    :]


  • innocence jaded.xx
    June 23, 2008

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    Amazing. It's so sad that this happens to so many of us. Especially the ones who don't deserve it. Reading this definitely brought back old memories, especially these lines:

    "I'm sick of lying to myself,
    Saying you'll never hurt me again,"

    Pretty much incredible. You worded that perfectly. I also loved the whole second stanza. Hell, the whole thing was great ! Thanks for sharing <3 :]


  • LadyLuff
    June 23, 2008

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    this is so sad but i like it alot because i can soo realate to it!
    it was a good write

    What did i do to feel this pain,
    All i wanted was you,

    this is so how i feel!

    nice flow of words keep up the great writing hope to read more