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Jaded Soul (4 -18)

 

One jaded soul,
lost behind the toils and snares.
Watch it devour anyone who cares.
The frame of mind she's in,
no one knows better.
Sweet and sour soul, to indulge;
expose that virgin innocence
to men of the night.

Morning light birthed.
She approached her abode,
walking in from her nightly escape.
Needing rest, for she gave them her best.
Days flew by, then she took the test.
Happy Birthday Motherhood, guess what I got you?
But she wasn't ready, not a whit.

The beauty she had, she knows she sacrificed,
opening herself like a flower about to bloom
to the men of the night.

Now she's alone
and doesn't know what to do.

 

 

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Lowercase Prelude

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Wordbank

18. Devour, Indulge, Escape, Rest, Forfeit, Gift, Whit, Beauty, Flower (you may specify).

Option One... Teenage pregnancy.

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  • movedon
    July 24, 2008

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    "She's all alone..and doesn't know what to do"

    I think I can relate to that line more than anything. "the beauty she knew she savrificed" (or something to that affect) is a very clever line. Ya know how they say when you're surrounded by tons of people is when you feel most alone? I have 14 brothers and I love them to death, but when I'm with them, I've never felt more alone. Lovely write.

    Warmest,
    Mylee


  • VoltaicHypnosis gold member
    June 28, 2008

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    Wow, very deep, and a magnificent use of the wordbank! Best of luck and remember to put your option number/s in your title also, thankyou.


  • LadyDementia gold member
    June 27, 2008

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    Beautifully penned. I do like how you've used the word bank. The poem leaves a lot to the readers mind...another thing I like. Excellent write, good luck


  • lowercase prelude gold member
    June 23, 2008
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    it's supposed to be "now", thanks for spotting it.


  • Ashley Mosely
    June 23, 2008

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    This is very intriguing..throughout the write i'm trying to figure out the situation and who she might be..i like poems that make me question..good luck in the contest!
    in the last stanza is it "no" or "now" ?

    ash

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