When you miss someone, you don't just miss them
You heart aches for just another minute with them
You cry yourself to sleep at night, wishing for their comfort
When you miss someone, your life changes
People around you look different
your whole perspective on life has changed
What if your best friend gets killed
Or your parents never come home from work
Life is different
When you miss someone, it isn't because of sorrow
No, it is much much deeper
When you miss someone, you miss them from the heart
MorganTea
Author notes
I wrote this in memory of my mammaw who died of cancer a few years back.
I also wrote this in memory of my horse who died of a snake bite when she was only seven months old.
When you miss someone, nothing is ever the same again, but Jesus helped me get through both deaths.
I know many people can relate to what I'm writing, but I understand if you can't.
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Comments
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You really described the depths of missing someone, because you are right it comes straight from the heart. I thought the line "Life is different" is a wonderful summary. Great Work x
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Wow; very beautiful poem filled with honest emotions from the heart. So much truth to this piece. I definately agree.
Great write!
Thanks for entering & best of luck
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heartfelt
I like the deep feeling in this so much, the specificity. I think you could come up with a much stronger line than 'life is different'--there are so many ways that life might be different, and you have a very particular one to convey. Good luck in the contest. -
Key on point
This is exactly how I feel about my "little Princess" Hera. I think you had summed it best with this. Granted, I know I will never feel like this when I lose my parents (sad, I know), but when it came to Hera, yeah, I look at things much differently, and in a sense, she gave me a sense of enlightenment, and what it really means to be when and where in life. Excellent write, and thank you very much for sharing
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Very Moving
The last three lines had me a little teary.
These words are so simple, but I think it says exactly what you want it to. Truly missing someone has no detailed description and you have still managed to communicate it. I was able to relate to you in my own small way and you didn't just talk about the pain, you made your audience feel a glimpse of it.
Don't stop writing, your expressive ability is moving to your reader.
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True words - things are never the same. I lost my mother 2 weeks ago, and my father just 362 days before that - so it's been a year of many changes. I miss telling them certain things, showing them certain things - we were close and I keep seeing things I want to share with them, but they are gone.
Great write for emotion.
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SAD!!
I loved this piece.
And i can so relate.
Becuase this is very true on not one but
many Levels,And in many ways.
I liked how you gathered all these things together
and put them in one piece.
And I just have to say sorry to hear abdout your grandmother and horse.
I too have suffered death in my family.
The thing is i have had death come back to back within 2 years saying my grandfather, my great-uncle, My grandmother, and my step-grandfather all within 2 years .. so i know you feel dear.
Either way that was an amazing write .
Good job hun.
-Mandi
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wow....this is so true. I myself am not a religious person, but I do think this is a really good way of putting those awful feelings of grief into words....great job!!
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*wahhhhhhhhhhahahaa* Ok I bawled...honestly! I am coping with the death of my 13 yr old lab, that died on Thursday morning at 4:40. She suffered greatly before passing...*sighs*
I am glad that your walk with the Lord was able to help you cope with the death of your beloved little (well not little, but you get my point) pet. We had a scare about my horse almost dying from colic...that was a nightmare!
That was a wonderful write- about pain, life and emotion
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when my farther died his chair remained empty, no one could sit on it, in the end we had to get rid of that old chair, it was like burying him all over again,
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I miss mammaw too. I didn't even have to read the author notes to see who it was about. She really loved us Morgan, we know that, but she suffered so much. It was her time to go, she knew that, and now she is with Jesus. I love you, kid.
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Thank you
Thanks for the review.
It wasn't my mom that died, it was my mammaw, or grandmother.
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I really think this truly explains the way you feel when you truly miss someone, Wonderful poem I am so sorry about your mom and your horse and I truly understand what you're writing about.
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