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Give in to me

As you lay your
eyes upon him
a yearning starts inside.

You stand no chance
of resisting him
no matter how hard you try.

As he slowly walks
toward you there's
a shiver racing up your spine.

Your eyes are fixed upon his stride
and the motion of hips,
as his sway hypnotizes your mind.

With just one glance
his eyes command you
to follow him outside.

You find yourself moving
your yearning body
taking you for a ride.


Finally you meet up
with him as he pulls
you into his arms.

You instantly give in
unable to resist all
his devilish charms.

As he leans his body closer
there is a quiver on
your bottom lip.

And as you feel his breath
upon your skin
all your defenses slip.

With just one touch your body
surrenders to the conquest of
his fiery finger tips.

His hand glides across
the small of your back
making you go weak in the knees.

As his lips kiss your neck
and his tongue dances upon your body
taking you as he pleases.

His mouth goes slowly lower
as he  spots the flower
upon your chest.

And his mouth quickly devours
the orchid tattoo
upon your breast.

At this point
you have melted
into a puddle in his arms.

As he kisses, licks, and nibbles
every inch of you, your neck,

breast, belly,  back, and arms.

In your sweet surrender
you eagerly beg and plead
"please go ever so lower still".

As you hear the beast inside him
growling for you to
surrender to his will.

With each touch your body yearning.
What will he do next?

As more excitement each advance brings.

As your flesh trembles
there is no will to resist
hopelessly giving in as he pulls your strings.

 

As you listen to the sounds
of his body you can hear
the beast from within.

And the only words he's saying
is "give in to me"
over and over again.

As your bodies give in to each other
and with each release he brings
you give out a loud primal scream.

As over and over he takes you
to ecstasies you have only
experienced in a dream.

You may think this is the end
but it is truly only
the beginning you see.

Because within us all is a beast,
hungry and growling way down deep.
screaming to you and me.
"GIVE IN TO ME!"








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  • Miss Macabre
    July 16

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    This is definitely lusty, and the flow was nice. A good write, thanks for entering and best of luck to you.

  • My this was just spectacular. Every single part of it was super.
    Favorite lines
    "Your eyes are fixed upon his stride
    and the motion of hips,
    as his sway hypnotizes your mind."
    Ohhh so beautiful
    ~Serenity

  • Very good rhyme scheme and wel executed rhythm in this very senual poem. Best of luck, and thanks for entering.

  • the first 3/4 of this write was amazing, the desxcriptions were really good and the imagry was very vivid. But after that the poem kind of flopped
    good luck in the contest

  • Poetryintheblood gold member
    February 13
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    Thank you for your deliciously sinful entry, Josie

  • WHOA! Slow down! lol nice write! very good. I could see it in my mind. Really good.


  • Mrs D
    January 9

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    ....

    you had me going with that one......EXCELLENT build up up ....great imagery ...very sensual and seducttive ...with every line you had me waiting for whats coming up next...what will happen now! i dont even have a fav line...they were all just captivating...very clear language ......this is one of the best poems i've read on AP...you goin to my favz so i can see more of your work when i have time !! good job .............


  • Luciferschild
    January 9

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    i like your veiw of sex, it is both romantic and somehow very cold, the poem is filled with carnal desire for someone and that someone is probably lucky to have you good poem


  • ASmileForYou
    January 5

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    The flow of the poem and the rhyme scheme are perfect. This was an extremely well-written poem. Thank you for entering!


  • WillAlwaysLove silver member
    December 22, 2008
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    Wonderful poem. I must tell you that I wanted more on the dark side (being entwinged with a beast) but then you wrote "within us is all a beast" and that was exceptional! Amazing write. Great glow and the words truly come off the page. Thank you for entering the contest and good luck.


  • pretty-r-a-v-e-girl
    August 15, 2008
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    Wowzers. I have an Orchid tattoo so this strange. Lol. Lovely write.


  • xrain dancerx
    August 10, 2008

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    holy crap. who knew a poem could be as awesome as that. lolz. i loved it! thanx for entering and good luck!
    *hugs* tay.

  • kraazk05
    August 5, 2008

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    Very carnal. Could stand a little tweaking in the rhyme/rhythm department, as someone else mentioned. Very vivid imagery and I like the creativity as far as the whole devil/demon thing goes.

    Nicely done.


  • Swan song gold member
    August 2, 2008
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    Wow this was really something


  • Deaths Desire
    July 17, 2008

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    very intense poem i read it all through without stopping. didnt like the pic though its a little graphic if you know what i mean


  • Still single
    July 13, 2008

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    Well done, i think it s very sexy poem and true to a lot of poeple. I like the rhymes as well although i'm sure that if you worked on it you could iron our the rhythm and metre, but well done, i liked it.


  • Sinfully Yours
    July 5, 2008
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    Nicely done! I do like it...always a resistance of giving in to someone lol! Good luck!


  • candymiser
    July 4, 2008

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    kinda raunchy

    though i'm not sure if i enjoy the picture. the poem was quite.. well. ehem! =] *blushes* i thought it would've been better if the flower was the vagina. lol. ask Georgia O'Keeffe about that one.


  • Sound of Madness
    July 1, 2008

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    This is really good. You could have taken it alot further, but I like where you left it. Good luck in the contest.


  • techno-tard
    July 1, 2008

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    I cannot even begin to describe where this took me...amazing work of art; and growling ...mmmm
    well done!


  • Tgrktz
    June 30, 2008

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    very good

    That picture says it all! Well almost, lol. You did a good job living up to that pic as far as leading the mind and emotion down that lusty trail. I liked your ending... so true! Good work


  • z etoile
    June 28, 2008
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    This poem was sure intense great job and thank you for sharing.


  • NeverSayAddiction
    June 27, 2008
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    wow...

    truly demonic...


  • Desire gold member
    June 25, 2008

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    Oh My~

    Wonderful piece You have versed but unfortunately this contest calls for pre-writes from my previous contests entered but I Thank You for taking the time
    Best wishes in all You do
    and much love & light~ Desire~*~


  • XXWolfOfInsanityxX
    June 25, 2008

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    A steamy and sensual piece that envelops all the senses into a blissful oneness. Beautifully done good luck in the contest this impressed me =D


  • Hetha gold member
    June 25, 2008
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    A steamy and sensual piece that envelops all the senses into a blissful oneness. Beautifully done. Good luck with the contests you are currently placing this in. I'm sure they will be quite impressed. I should be disappointed, if they aren't.


  • ShaShay
    June 24, 2008

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    Awesome

    What a trip you took the reader on with this one. I'm sweaty a little I think. ~wink~ Very nicely done without being crass, I envy your talent.


  • Dark Visions
    June 24, 2008
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    i must say it was the photo that pulled me in......

    very nice write

  • Tecohe
    June 24, 2008

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    To Do and To Be Done

    It is the primal dance found in your lyrics and the gender changes as the one who is "done" making it a complete experience of electricity.
    Tecohe

  • limechic
    June 24, 2008

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    amazinggg i love this one! so hot and fiery....the rhyming works well too! very detailed description; i nearly felt the shivers she did!

    loved it, great work!!

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