Other people look through me
past my kaleidoscopic colors,
seeing the darkness reflected
against the black background.
He looks inside, mesmerized
by the speckled spectrums,
the symmetric beauty which
radiates from deep within me.
A contest entry
- translucent by Saffron.
900 points, ended July 8, 2008, 13 entries
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Isn't nice when there is one person who can see through it all to the real you? I like the hopefulness in this work.
Thank you for writing this for the contest, and for sharing your talent with me.
Saffron
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the darkness of your colors is actually a brightness to others, reflected in the beauty of your words.
is that clear?
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Are you asking for a clarification or is that your interpretation? I'm confused lol.
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haha.. pretty bad when a comment is confusing, huh? no... i don't need clarification... the 'is it clear' was a poor attempt at humor... transparently bad..
ok.. maybe i am tired....
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sorry, but i'm confused. how can your "background" be black and have various colors? various blacks? which would be greys, which take the "darkness" effect away.
other words, the second paragraph is terrific. -
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I have changed the first stanza so it makes more sense. Thank you for pointing it out
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You're writing again!
This is fantastic. It's short but to the point, with your trademark stunning imagery. I love the differences between the other people and him. Best of luck in the contest!
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