Tied to yourself,
You can never let go.
Pretend to be happy,
But it's all just a show.
Beauty to beauty,
And heart to heart.
Desolate souls,
Can never part.
It's your own similarities
That are holding you back.
You fight your reflection,
With a personal attack.
Distorted reality
Shows your hearts desires.
Your life is consumed
By gray, cloudy fires.
You cannot chain yourself up,
And hope to be free.
You cannot fight with your soul,
Never expecting defeat.
Forgive yourself,
And try cutting the thread,
Before this "lifeline" of yours,
Makes you end up dead...
Author notes
Hmm... I've had total writers block, so this is all I could come up with.
My take on the pic was that the girl and the butterfly were part of the same being; both beautiful, just two sides to a person. One trying to break free, and fly out of her shell, the other hiding behind her perfections. The one hiding does not want to lose this side of herself, so she's chained it up, but in doing so, she's fighting deep inside with herself. She needs to cut the thread with which she has chained herself, so that both sides of her will flourish. If she doesn't, the battle with herself deep in her soul will end up killing her; if not physically, then spiritually, and emotionally.
photo credit: => Melanie G, deviant art
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'It's your own similarities
That are holding you back.
You fight your reflection,
With a personal attack.'
this is an amazing attemopt for writers block
you could have reworded the last line but what you tried to say was outstanding.
try this... just advice
Forgive yourself,
And try cutting the thread,
Before this "lifeline" of yours,
kills the life you have lead?
just make it flow a little better or something like that
but wow such an amazing write
after the contest talk to me after about this so we can make this perfect with two minds on this writers block can get lost this has fantastic potential be proud of this poem
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This is very lovely. The rhyme is well done and I love the imagery! Best of luck in the contest; you deserve it!
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NICE!
Nice! WOW!!! Ur an amazing poet!!! I love ur poem! Keep going! :)
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thanks for the comment. glad to know you liked my poem! =)
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For someone who has had total writers block, this is awesome work! It had me hooked right from the start and continued all the way through. I like your idea of the prompt
Good luck with your entry!
Claire x
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