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~ Yesterday ~


A haunting memory
of a joy,
I once knew.

With ten little fingers,
and ten little toes,

two little eyes,
and a smile to light up
the world,

depending on me
for your every need.

Unconditional love,
given and received,

  But that was yesterday-

and today,
My Little Angel
you soar through
the clouds

laughing and playing,
watching over me
from heaven on high.



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  • dontlove
    July 3
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    This is very beautiful.
    I kinda wanted to cry reading it.
    Really good.


  • aanika-xox
    June 24

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    i love the emotion behind this, but i have to say there are a couple things you could improve.
    1) your punctuation is weak. for example, the line "laughing and playing watching over me from heaven on high" should have a period or at least a comma after the word "playing".
    2) your verb tenses are a little confusing. in the first stanza you say "once knew" and then in the fourth you say "depending on me". it should be "depended on me".

    other than that, i really enjoyed this and i felt what you were trying to get across.

  • thunder.xx.paradise silver member
    June 24

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    this is simple but complex and beautiful at the same time. even though im not a mother i can almost feel your emotions as you wrote this.
    good luck in the contest

  • Desire gold member
    June 23

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    Precious!!

    Oh My Word this is a Beauty of a piece and sure know how to tug at the Heartstrings
    Just Love this!!
    Precious!! Wahoooooooooo
    -sniffle-sniffle-

    Thank You for sharing Your Heart and Spirit~
    Many blessings to You in the contest Sweet Soul
    Best wishes too
    and much love~ Desire~*~


  • Loveandblessings2u gold member
    June 23

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    Ok, So now you have me crying,
    this is just too beautiful, sad indeed,
    but it reaches out to the heart for sure.
    I'm going to add this to my favorites.
    Outstanding writing, then again what else
    could I expect from you.

    Loveandblessings2u & yours always
    Love Ya,
    Twinsy


  • Morgan Kennedy Nite
    June 23

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    Aww I think it's a common thought between all mothers, and I think you did an excellent job in explaining how it feels to someone who isn't a mother. It's a ray of hope none the less, I think. Good luck in the contest, Mom
    Love, Little One


  • penman gold member
    June 23
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    Excellent

    Oh my does this touch in so many ways. A lovely sentiment. Best of luck in the contest.


  • Carolina Moon silver member
    June 23

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    Aww you have written beautifully on such a sad, sad topic. my friend. I wish you the best in the contest..your words touch the heart and tear up the eyes.
    and love and blessings
    Linda


  • Viva La Vie Boheme
    June 23

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    This poem is touching, and written so that it warms your heart, but the story is so sad It's a terrible thing, but you've written something so beautiful from it! Brilliant, as always.

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