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Another Night

Heavy eyes beg for sleep.
Insolent accessories,
how dare they disturb a thought so deep.

Dreams distort reality.
Bewitching things,
so uncourteous to your sanity.

Thoughts stumble through your mind.
Wretched necessities,
unraveling whats been intertwined.

Realizations disturb the merit.
Fraudulent epiphanies,
allowing you to bare it.

Sleep eventually comes uninvited.
A cruel victory.
Forcing me to ponder, yet again, the undecided.

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  • yesterdaysNews
    July 25
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    ahh, i know this one to well.

    even ahd me rereading. fantastic!!


  • emmytayfwine
    July 6

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    This is splendid work.
    I really like the lines
    "Realizations disturb the merit.
    Fraudulent epiphanies,
    allowing you to bare it."

    The words you use and the rhythm is very nice.

  • TyrannyForestFairy
    June 30

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    great work, i love how you manipulated the topic of not being able to fall asleep through detailed and vivid descriptions by using suited and descriptive terms within the context of the poem. awesome job


  • NyteShade
    June 24

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    Not being able to sleep sucks.

    Thoughts stumble through your mind.
    Wretched necessities,
    unraveling whats been intertwined.

    I can relate to this stanza. All of it flows nicely together.


  • Sadistik
    June 24

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    Awesome!

    I'm so happy you decided to finish it. I love the poem the flow id great and as always you had me captivated. Its crazy how hard we fight sleep just to submit to our exaustion in the end ins't it...sleep is for the weak or so they say...but I have yet to see someone strong enough to resist it.

    I love most of your poetry and this is no dif, I can't wait to read the next one and as I said the first time you show this to me. I think its great and I am taken aback by your talent.

    well done
    -Dustin-


  • Supernova
    June 23

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    Medocrity non exisitant

    Sad but somber, I love the structure and the rhyme. What a way with words doll. It's great. I'm glad it got finished.


  • UnityHope gold member
    June 23

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    story of my life Rena Bena!
    very well written my friend!

    ♥ dani


  • Shadow Darkstar silver member
    June 23

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    First off: I LOOOVVVEEE IIITTT!

    Secondly: The slant rhyme you have here makes this flow very well. Each stanza is only three lines long, and it's different, in a good way.

    Thirdly: I can relate tot his, very well, as I keep having nightmares myself lately. I've been trying to think of ways to get them to go away, and nothing has worked yet. The whole message of this poem just speaks to me.
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