Darling,
aren't you a sweet one-
Oh so deserving of affection,
of the attention you desire.
Bleeding lips never looked so attractive
and the bruises on your hips-
they'll be my guide tonight.
Weren't you the one
always talking about blackened eyes?
Well, now you have them.
See through them, Baby.
Tell me what I've done and why I'm doing.
Whisper lies and useless words in my ears.
Regret isn't my strong point
but you knew that before you came.
Came to me to say it was over,
that you don't want to do this again.
You bend so pretty girl,
your own twisted words admit your defeat.
Admit it.
You can't resist me.
Author notes
-"You think I love you? You think I care?"
A contest entry
- he kissed me with glass between his teeth by Sam-I-Am.
600 points, ended July 7, 2008, 13 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Teens & Young Adults by DAMSELx.
300 points, ended August 30, 2008, 101 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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Wow, very interesting piece! I enjoyed this. This one really has me thinking. Great write!
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Whoa.... A very nice use of the title; A very twisted write. This is really awesome. I like the psychosomatic feel to it.
Really good
Sam
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You, know I try to understand this kind of poem, but it's really hard for me. I guess it's because I write from the flip side of same coin. It certainly has some vivid imagery.
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I tend to write from all the sides.
I guess I don't fully understand what you mean by don't understand.
As in you don't understand how someone could think this way?
((I don't either.))
I don't see things that I write all the time.
Or did you mean in a different way?
Oh, and thank you for the compliment.
-Les -
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lol..now I'm confused... More as I don't understand how someone feels this way. But ya know, I can enjoy it for the imagery and for the different perspective...and the fact it really made me think.
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