Hatred, is just fear of loving someone
Fear, is just our way of worrying
Worry, is trying to be too perfect
Perfection, is trying to protect yourself
Protection, is a sense of loving someone
Love, is what makes the world go 'round
Author notes
My best friend and cousin Rose of Despair inspired me. Her style of poem is the same as this one!
The idea came right off the top of my head and just kind of landed on paper, or in this case, the computer screen! LOL
A contest entry
- All 13 an Under Deep Poets Prt. 2 by Medina Regal.
700 points, ended October 14, 2008, 19 entries
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Wow. I know of this one game called "Turn Hate to Love"
It was a puzzle that I used to do when I was little
The object was to change the word HATE in four steps to love, tweaking the word so that you only change one letter at a time.
Anyway, This reminds me of that, except it's twisting the actual emotion, not just the words. Plus you use to word from the previous line, and change a bit of that, and etc.
That's a really cool style you've got there!
-->pia♫♪
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hmm interesting.
nice but it seems too much like a poetic dictionary list.
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awww.so sweet! This is such a lovely write! Great job
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Hi there :)
Hi there, and welcome to AP!
I love the way you took me on this little journey of feeling, thoughts and emotions ~
I am one of the Judges i the Poetic Challenge where wbrio is currently trying to make the Finals.....and with the inspiratin he found here, I believe he shall do well ~
Thank you so much for sharing!
God bless you!
Bear ~
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HI there
I can see how you have managed to inspire the darling wbiro! That is not an easy task at all! I loved this poem, and they are not at all common or easy to do! WELL DONE! Thank you for being the inspiration that you are, and I hope you are loving your time spent here on the site! Lot's of talented and wonderful people here 
Mel
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Well, you have a circular poem here, and since I've never written one, I am inspired to give it a try (and if I'm inspired, I'll give you credit)!...
I might as well critique your writing while I'm here... let's see... I see you placed thought before style- my kind of writing (but not everyone's- some people are slaves to fashion!); but there IS a style- all first letters of lines are capitalized, center-aligned, no punctuation at the end of lines, free-verse... the piece does not exhibit any poetic devices (rhyme, meter, assonance, consonance, alliteration, metaphor, simile, classic forms, etc. etc. etc...) so purists would not find anything to drool over poetically... so you have a philosophical piece that says something, rather than a collection of stylistic poetic devices that says nothing beyond the cliché... (you'll find that the more the style, the less the message, and vice-versa- it is a rare poet who can manage both; something to strive for...
OK, now for my attempt at a circular poem... (my term, I don't know if it exists already, let me check... yes, there are some vague uses of it in poetry) OK, writing...
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aww this is a nice poem!
and i enjoyed the read your pretty good
=)
keep up the good work
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Thanks Morgan, I appreciate the recognition! Anyways, this was a good write for one of two you just wrote today! I thought it was very mature for your age.
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Wise...
Well, it seems boredom makes you write great things! You're another younger writer I've seen that is so mature! Your words flow beautifully, it's simple but it has a weighty impact. You seem to be like a kid watching on at the adults or the world in general. This was good, it's like one of those inspirational pieces that people hang up so they can always remind themselves of. It really has you thinking!
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You make it seem as if you think young writers cannot write good poems.
It isn't exactly that rare; you adults just underestimate us more commonly than we write well.
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