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Far Away

Although my chance with you is fading,
I'll still continue dreaming for you,
for happiness.

Even though we are far apart,
my love for you continues to grow;
my feelings shall never change.

We both made regrettable mistakes,
dreaming for an unrealistic future
where pain is non-existent.

So I’ll call out one last time,
for my overdue bliss
before my hopes begin to vanish.

How deeply I fell for you,
and you hurt me;
I love you still.

Through the wind I hear echoes,
of the darkness surrounding me:
whisper our fate.

I do not wish to listen,
for I know that destiny:
we don't belong.

Though soon I'll begin to stop the denial,
and give up on our future,
hurting though I am.

Painful stabs are taken,
my heart forever wounded;
only you can rescue me now.

Will you come save my heart,
as I barely hold on
immobilized by my fear

My doubts could melt away,
even when our chances are slim;
only you can save me now

I know there’s more,
beyond the barrier of reality;

Just don't give up

 

Lies roam freely there,
where everything is believed;

it's all true.

I want to see what I don’t,
I need to have a miracle;

see through happiness.

No matter what you say,
our bonds are unbreakable;
my love is unbreakable.  

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  • ComposMentis
    October 3, 2008

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    First of all it was very hard to read due to the backround and I would suggest you change it in order to encourage reviews.
    The poem itself was quite poignant, the feeling of wanting something you know is not meant to be but wanting it anyway. You described it very well and ended on a note of determination.
    Good Piece.


    • brokenxxangel
      October 10, 2008
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      thanks. I would change the backround, but I like it too much, so oh well.


  • Tennyo
    August 5, 2008
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    wow. this is good. i also like all the mmppp lines. XD. lol.


    • brokenxxangel
      August 5, 2008
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      lol. I'm just glad that very... few, actually.. but SOMEONE(s) actually take the time to read it all!

  • BuffSMGfan3
    July 20, 2008

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    Cool write I loved it the whole concept and the way you used your word.........It was absolutely F-A-B-O-U-S-L-O-U-S............ the way u put everything together was so cool and the words you used flow together nicely......This has to be one of my favorite poems........... Dont ever stop writing.............................I definetly will have to check out more of your work.........very good again.........keep it up.


  • Little Miss Mental
    July 15, 2008

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    the amount of love and hope in this is unbelievable! I also love the background Hope you do well... <3


  • greyhaime silver member
    June 25, 2008

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    welcome t o allpoetry

    let me say that I love the emotions that are behind this and think that it is well said for a writer so young.
    the only thing I can suggest is that you change the font color of the poem as it was difficult to read.
    but thank you for sharing this with us here and for joining the site.keep writing.
    cheers'
    Grey
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