I, a bump on log
abutting reservoir
took lesser shots,
nervous of passers by
as was the painted turtle
sunning mid point
on silvered crook
sailing green glass
pivoting nearer the lense
while a million moments passed
green reflected
blue silver turtle
in perfect pose
Author notes
and I have the pictures to prove it
willing to email
this poem is in flux for now
A contest entry
- Just a small slice, please by Luna Tique Fringe.
1000 points, ended July 12, 2008, 10 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - anything your heart desires, prewrites, new, everything! by wendymolly.
555 points, ended July 27, 2008, 41 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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very expressive by anyone's means!
for me, this is a poem worth feeling inside. And for that you are a finalist in the contest! Good Luck! 
take care always, ~pithyAplomB 
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Re-edited the re-edit of the edit...
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I like that you did your own thing, with the suggestions I offered. good job.
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I liked the idea of this, kind of a quirky little write.
I do think it needs an edit, and I hope the earth doesn't open up an swallow me, but...
I think this would be good center aligned, OMG...I feel a rumble...lol.
I took liberty to do so,with some small edits, and put a couple more of your lines in dashes, so if you read those lines alone it's a poem within a poem.
I hid it on one of my postings...I'll send you the link so you can look. Just let me know when you've seen it and I'll take it off the page. I'll im you the link.
Thnaks for entering
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