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Wedding Day Reflections

Pure white lilies,
Wedding day pictures,
Moments to treasure.

 

Hearts in unison,
Icing on the cake,
Crisp, virgin snow.

I fly with the eagles
up to the mountains high,
down to the valleys low,
where the verdant pastures grow
and sit beside cool, refreshing streams.

Like a symphony

My heart's inspired,
A song that endures through the night,
Until the next sunrise!

Author notes

h a r r i e t 5 6 7
I have done it in the shape of a wedding cake - can you see it?

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Comments

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  • Poetic-Theorem silver member
    October 19

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    This is awesome
    Your words are sooo beautiful
    and you placed them in a wedding cake shape
    Wowzers, very impressive

    I love the imagery and the walk through life that you have shown
    Very loving and adorable write
    Thank you for honoring my daughter's wedding with this poem
    I really do appreciate you

    Wish you the best in the contest
    David


  • Treasure 5 gold member
    July 30

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    This is beautiful and congratulations on your gold trophy. My wedding was really awsome to it was on the beach. Thank you for sharing and it is a pleasure to read.

    • harriet567
      July 31
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      Thank you for your comment. I didn't actually win the Gold, but thanks anyway... pleased to hear about your wedding on the beach!


  • Darkwell
    January 29

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    i see the cake brillient! the piece feels like love and free spirit and i love the images you created in it. lovely


  • iamthebeatles
    January 24

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    Great images on weddings. I love the lines about eagles and freedom. wonderful piece of work. It shows emotion in marriage and enduring love,.

    cassie


  • couldbeworse
    January 15

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    great write and loved the wedding cake shape. fav stanza:

    Like a symphony

    My heart's inspired,
    A song that endures through the night,
    Until the next sunrise!

  • piccola silver member
    November 26, 2008

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    this is a beautiful reflection of a wedding day and a wonderful memory. A picture doesn't do it sometimes ... so try to capture that feeling and keep it. Thank you for entering the contest


  • alandriel1138
    November 3, 2008

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    this is such a beautiful piece. i love the way you described the feeling.
    "Hearts in unison,
    Icing on the cake,
    Crisp, virgin snow." that's great
    lovely, lovely write very well done
    good luck in the contest!!


  • trekkergirl
    October 24, 2008

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    This just made me smile. It is so cute. I also love the blue background and the butterfly. Good job picking out this background for this poem as it only adds to it. Your poem is nicely written and a pleasure to read. thanks for entering this contest

    • harriet567
      October 28, 2008
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      Thanks for your comment - pleased you liked the background as well! This must be one of the largest contests with so many entries!


  • Mad Moon silver member
    July 13, 2008

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    Boy, can I see the celebration in these words! Beautifully done, my friend. Lots of wonderful imagery, and nice use of language. Thanks for the wonderful addition to this contest, and Good Luck! "f


  • PrabhuDayal Khattar silver member
    June 29, 2008

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    So now I also attended this wonderful marriage my friend..and thanks for the invitation for such a heart warming ceremony...love it...

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