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Mist on the beach

I cried
Lost on the beach
Feeling so isolated and alone
My faith left me
All my dreams seemed to of died
Sitting on the beach
In my tears
She came from the sea
Women of the Sea
Goddess of the waters
A crazy look in her eyes
She spoke in words I did not understand
Native Hawaiian
I was lost
In a haunted daze
In a maze
She caught me as I was falling
Holding me up
As I cried until I could not cry any more
In her arms I stood silent
Feeling the spirit
Of women of the Sea

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  • dustookie2
    June 24, 2008
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    There is much spiritualty within these words. You paint a picture of beauty yet there lay a depth for the reader to explore. Like the lapping waves your words flow as you take my mind to the seas the ebb and flow of tides the oneness and peace with nature....this goddess of the sea this spirit. Nicely constructed...


  • StarEyes
    June 23, 2008

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    Jon,

    This is beyond words! I really like this one alot! I think you did remarkable on this one! I love the pictures this painted in my mind as I was reading! Great job!!

    and love my friend

    Nyetta