I might have forgiven too easily
But I love way too much to care
I don't worry about anything else
Two-ended blade; a forgiveness/love paradox
Two sides of a double-edged sword
That is ripping me arm from leg
All I can do is profess my love
But I keep getting pushed away
Makes me wonder if I forgave when I shouldn't have
According to everyone else, I was wrong
But on my behalf; I need it, I need her
No one understands; which just sharpens the blades
Two sides of a double-edged sword
That is ripping me heart from mind
All I can do is pursue her forever
But she keeps pushing me away
I love because I do; no specific reason
I give her my all; literally my all
Don't have much left in the tank
Yet she keeps twisting the rapier in my torso
Two sides of a double-edged sword
That is ripping me soul from spirit
All I can do is try my hardest
But she might push me too far away
Author notes
A lot has run through my mind all day; as we slowly rebuild a connection that isn't full. Forgiveness and love are the only things on my mind...yet I can't draw any logical conclusions to my ways.
Maybe I'm no good for anyone; the only one I live to impress is forced to turn a blind eye. It isn't her fault and I don't blame her; both sides of the blade have impaled me at one point or another, and now I walk around with this butterfly knife through my body.
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Wow this poem was filled with so much emotion, so sad, and deep of a write. I really loved the lines "Two sides of a double-edged sword/that is ripping me arm from leg/that is ripping me heart from mind/all I can do is pursue her forever/that is ripping me soul from spirit/all I can do is try my hardes/but she might push me too far away.
I can sort of relate to it too and let me just tell you that sometimes pursuing someone forever is not worth all the pain and effort. From my personal experiece I love someone and I didn't think I could ever move on, but I realized one day that all the tears I cried were just going to keep coming and I would never be truly happy. I deserved someone better and though it was hard I moved on and I met a man, now my fiance that gives me the love I've always imagined. He's love me and I love him and that's really all you need in life. So just think about it, are you truly happy, and if not only you can change that. Really a brilliant write. Thank you for sharing and Good Luck in finding someone that actually deserves you, they are out there, sometimes they find you when you aren't looking and at least expect it. Also in the contest.
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Well done, full of imagery and emotion. I wish you the best of luck in this contest...Scott
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Thank you
thank you this is wonderful i liked the way you displayed your emotion.it was wonderful
god bless and goodluck in the contest
cassie -
I really like the double-edge sword theory! What a beautiful yet sad poem. thank you for entering
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sooooo... i have a few things to say... first... i know the feeling... my ex did the same thing... i never believed it was his fault either.... second... he kept toying with my emotions, so i just gave it up. im not telling you to give up, im just saying, be careful what you choose to do... i did that and it really broke my heart. this is a really good poem, really. i love it.
I love because I do; no specific reason
I give her my all; literally my all
Don't have much left in the tank
Yet she keeps twisting the rapier in my torso
this is my favorite stanza... 'i love because i do; no specific reason' i agree with this 100% and many other people should as well.
'yet she keeps twisting the rapier in my torso' so much pain here... and i know the pain. im very sorry that you must feel this pain... very good job!
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This is beautiful with great use of imagery and full of emotion... Thank you for entering and good luck
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Love is blind as they say....makes us blind as well I believe....but that is the beauty of it...defies logic and reason...i quite liked the use of the double edged sword metaphor, it describes well the emotion behind the poem....I liked the grim feel it great work...
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i like the imagery in this one...it's well written! i like the way those 3 stanzas are so similar and just a few words change each time. hopefully she's got good reason for pushing you away
great write!
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