Your lungs were my coffin
Making me nauseous
Pretending your willing to care
For a "lost" soul
But you couldn't see
I was fine with being me
And you could never help
Not when your caught up in the person
You don't want to be
My dear do you see
I'm breaking out of the shell
The one you placed around me
You splattered hearts on a silver canvas
Breaking your fingers to put me up there
My dear don't you see
My heart belongs to me
My friend don't you see
You make the worst come out in me
Full of love
Full of life
Isn't that all you ever wanted there to be
I can't compare
I can't compete
I don't exist
I am only a fictional piece
My dear you made me
A fictional piece
I am a fictional piece
We were only make believe
Author notes
This did not end like I had planned.
I think it may be too repetitive.
A contest entry
- Raw Emotion by loving.a.soldier.
600 points, ended June 27, 2008, 26 entries
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Comments
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Good job with this poem!! You did well with it. A tad repetitive...but sometimes that can be a good thing! Keep it up! Thanks for entering and good luck in the contest!
The One and Only...
~Lynn Jones
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wow..I think this is pretty good. a fictional piece, how original. and a nice rhyme and flow to it as well. I really liked this ...Good Luck in the contest
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