i unraveled my trust for her to hold
an gave her my heart when it was dead an old
she was that missing piece in life
that we all languish for
the little thing in reality that we all want to explore
an what did i get for stepping out of my routine life
the sickest feeling of wanting to feel my own death
and to be just left their dying and gasping for breath
she found someone else after she promised she wouldn't
i assure she did it to see me suffer
to make my pathetic life just a little rougher
every glimpse at her picture i fall to my knees
an bleed to forget each painful thought within my head
so i can stumble on in life with little dread
an evade the last an only words she said
only to leave behind that soothing voice
that twines through each vein
constantly trying to drive me insane
so i will finally give up an press the gun to my brain
an pull the trigger to end this fucked up love game
Author notes
what does this peom mean to you an what do you think this person exactly did to me????
comment plz dont be harsh
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I just had to read this. The title caught my eye.
You know, I'm not certain of what this person did to you, but I would like to know.
My vague guess is that you ended up showing your feelings and put so much trust into them, then they just threw it away like trash and took back everything they said like it hadn't meant a thing.
Maybe I'm only guessing that because if I were to read this poem and compare it to my life, that'd be the case.
Whatever happened, it caused awful feelings.
And I'm sorry
There's a part that definitely tugged at my heart...
"she found someone else after she promised she wouldn't
i assure she did it to see me suffer
to make my pathetic life just a little rougher
every glimpse at her picture i fall to my knees
an bleed to forget each painful thought within my head"
Heart break, seriously
It hurts when someone that was once such a big part of your life turns into something you can't even stand to look at. Not in person. Not in a picture. It just hurts like a fuckin' bitch
Loved this write.
Kudos
Sincerely,
dovey ~
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thx thats basicaly what this poem is about
but there is a little bit more to the story
thanks for understanding
an for the lovely comment
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Wow
This is beautiful. Dark, depressing, and completely amazing. The emotion in this showed so well, that its almost like I could feel it running through my own veins. It has happened to all of us I do believe, me included. I love the way you described everything.
<3 ~(Chanted)~
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i love it. its dark and painful, which makes it erriely beautiful. i think you got screwed over on this game called love, and that someoen promised forever and it seemed way too short. i can relate to thep ain of loss in love, and the feeling it was intentional. i think its a great write, but i wish you didnt write it with such authority. remember, there is someone for every one, though it may not seem that way. love ya bunches, chelsea
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I know exactly how this feels...
exactly...
I've had teh same thing happen to me...
He actually sat there and listened to me while I cried. Didnt say a word. Like he enjoyed seeing my fucking pain or some kind of shit...I know exactly how you feel...especially the end...i just want to end it all...notice how thats not past tense
Anyway. Aside fromt hat. I loved the format of this. Like every two lines rhymed, then one didnt, etc. Loved it. You put your emotions into this in a great way.
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thx!!!! ur da shit hana i wuv u
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