Come softly to me
tranced of tenderness
and sweet love
aware of something greater
our hearts are privy to
Give me the gentle down
your diamonds rest upon
and my heart shall dissolve
in those precious jewels
returning them to soft dawn
Outside union life appears
artificial and disaffected
by beauty's exquisite truth
A contest entry
- All about love. by OurxBeginning.
300 points, ended June 24, 2008, 19 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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I liked the idea of a diamond in this. Love is like a diamond.. rare and beautiful. The ending line summed it up well, and even though it's short, it was powerful. Thanks for entering and good luck.
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Mark.....me thinks that you grow soft with love!! This was so beautiful in a completley non-chaotic way!! It just flowed off the tongue and read to soft and sensually...Very well done!!!
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'Outside union life appears
artificial and disaffected
by beauty's exquisite truth'
loved your closing stanza
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Wow, soft, beautiful, touching, packed with emotion and an absolutely wonderful read. Ahhh so pretty. Makes one's heart sigh just reading it.
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oh bro this is a wonderufl piece that brought the sighs and dreams out of me. you write with such beauty and depth. its amzing
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Give me the gentle down
your diamonds rest upon
and my heart shall dissolve
in those precious jewels
returning them to soft dawn
Sigh...wonderful piece Mark.
Ruby
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wow this one didn't hurt my head mark, are you having an off night?
i kid i kid, well except the hurt part i meant that hehe
awesome write!
Tasha
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