Its late again
The clock strikes twelve
She sits alone in the darkness
Always alone
Blankly starring at the wall in front of her
Barley aware of her surroundings
Her life has been a blur
These past few months have been her hell
She is only slightly there
She doesn’t comprehend
Only survives
Everyday quietly passes
Without her true recollection
Her mind can only scream one thing
His name
He is all she sees throughout the day
Though he’s only a picture from her memory
His voice is the only one that speaks clearly to her
His name intensely burned into her
Sucking every inch of life towards it
She is able to pick up every sense every movement from him
Her tears refuse to run
For if they do they may never stop
She continues the delusion
She knows this must be a dream
She has to believe
For if he really left
How could she sill be standing
Breathing
Living
Author notes
I wrote this about my ex boyfriend Joe who I miss like crazy.
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this is soo sad! i know the feeling very well.
Her tears refuse to run
For if they do they may never stop
i had done this a lot too... and then i finally did choose to cry, and i think i did as much for like 2 hours. good job! -
love all the imagery in this piece! thank you so much for entering my contest and i wish you the best of luck! ~CarnalNineTailedFox
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Very sad, but very true. There have been many of us who have either been turned down or have broken up with somebody who we cared about deeply (not just an ex boyfriend), and miss like crazy. This poem wasn't heavy on much, but it was packed with truth and feeling. Thank you for this write.
Sincerely,
modernxtimes -
Intresting
sort of reminded of someone i once new
good work
1 of the few who pull off no rhyme!
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Very nice write! It's very sad and easy to relateto. Thanks for entering!
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