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Don't Turn Away

Crumbling to the ground;

                           you do not see?

That life within, is about to leave.

Turned away in disgust;

                          don't you believe?

Don't think, 'you' can't be decieved.

 

 

Even the greatest of beings -- fall,

                how you handle it, says it all.

Don't turn away from me;

               knowing, nothing in life is guaranteed.

 

Author notes

Photo: Kudos to Photobucket.

When I first viewed the photo I saw the corporates all facing the one direction. I thought of work... It wasn't until I came back {because my mind was still rolling from the image and the words.}and then, I saw the woman laying off to the side.

How blind are we when we don't look...

A contest entry

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  • Desire gold member
    June 24, 2008

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    Thank You!!

    Thank You for Your entry: Don't Turn Away
    This piece tugged hard at Spirit and while I was reading which I did several times~ The last four lines painted a strong message and after I inhaled Your verse I kept seeing what looks like a green grasshopper but for some reason was getting the word: cricket...whether the sound of a cricket but happened to be from the grasshopper...unsure but was getting that- the word in Line 6- decieved...I kept being pulled back and it looks like the i & e were switched...decieved- deceived
    For some reason was getting a reference to: the market
    seeing a woman feeling fruit- like picking up fruit- getting word: tangerine~ Aaaaaaaaaw and words: Farmer's Market
    also being shown a worm- separate- for some reason...
    I'm getting phrase: New Hairstyle...hearing reference to a *bob*-
    Ooooooooh being shown Tori Spelling- bob...and notation-
    bring out features
    Hopefully that makes some sense
    Love the notation in the AC- how many did notice the woman laying to the side?
    Powerful images You have brought forth

    These words grabbed and pulled~
    Even the greatest of beings -- fall,
    how you handle it, says it all.
    Don't turn away from me;
    knowing, nothing in life is guaranteed..
    Unique Voice spoken~

    Thank You for sharing Your Heart also Spirit!
    Best wishes to You in the contest Sweet Soul
    **Judging will be done shortly...
    Many blessings too
    and much love & light~ Desire~*~