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~ Lovers Tango ~

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You are the even song of my soul
soft melodic rhymes caress my heart
as you take control
my mind dances with anticipation

as mulled berry kisses
linger on my lips
claiming me as yours
you take hold of my hips

Each touch whispers I love you
descending into an emotional high
your passion pushes through
entwined in a lovers tango

Moving to the rhythm of
slow, slow, quick, quick, slow
pleasure escapes my lips
in erotic gasping moans

Free styling to our love song
an unadulterated moment in time
under a jeweled twilight
the rhythm of our bodies combine

Our skin dressed in gems of passion
surrendering, sating our need
the sound of our union cascades
on a sultry summer breeze

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  • Brazos silver member
    June 26, 2008

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    You captured the pic with melodic rhythm and soul. I found myself somewhat short of breath at the end, thank you for that!

    Thanks for entering, and good luck in the contest.
    Novy & Brazos


    • onesugar gold member
      July 8, 2008
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      Thank you B & Novy for the silver

      Truly appreciated

      Love ~sugar~

    • onesugar gold member
      June 27, 2008
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      Always a pleasure B. Glad you enjoyed.
      Love ~sugar~


  • Dark Otter
    June 24, 2008

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    Uh hmmmmmm!

    Is honey getting her groove on again. What are are we gonna have to do to slow her down? Obviously, a good write that leaves this old, tired males blushing to the ends of his toes. Thanks for the read, Michelle.


    • onesugar gold member
      June 24, 2008
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      You blushing never What can I say, there is just something about my muse that makes me want to write.
      Always a pleasure to have you read. I appreciate your lovely comment.
      Love ~sweetness~ xxx


  • Wayne Leon Learmond
    June 24, 2008

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    Yes, I would call this tasteful erotic too. Brilliant writing. I wish I could write erotic, but I can't. Anyway. I found this very very sensual. Wonderful piece of work. Well done Sugar. Good luck in the contest.

    With
    Dark
    Love
    Wayne Leon
    xx


    • onesugar gold member
      June 24, 2008
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      YEAH RIGHT!
      Thanks sweetie, always a pleasure to have you read
      valued and appreciated
      Love ~sugar~ xxx

  • midnightblue1272
    June 23, 2008
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    Nice!

    Erotic, but tasteful. Love this one, sis.

  • twodie4
    June 23, 2008
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    This goes with the prompt so well
    left a wonderful feeling
    td4

    • onesugar gold member
      June 24, 2008
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      thank you for reading
      Truly appreciated
      ~sugar~


  • Reptile Lady gold member
    June 23, 2008

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    Oh wow the heat the passion, the lust and what beautiful music is played in this sensual explosive write
    Flawless
    Good luck
    Julie xx

    • onesugar gold member
      June 23, 2008
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      Thank you Julie, for your lovely comment
      Truly appreciated
      ~sugar~ xx

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