Put the whodad on the hammer
Slept in dirt and grime
Married Mable in a stable
Smoked some weed to calm his mind
Hitched a ride to San Francisco
Talked with Peggy Sue
Bought an ounce that was milk thistle,
Diarrhea turned him blue
Squeezed a lemon with James Dean,
on the Mount of Mary.
Chuckled loudly in-between,
Loved this land of good and plenty.
In the streets of Greenwich Village,
ran into the law.
Took the pinch without the pillage.
Left his virtue at her door.
Poured a shot of Old Grand Dad.
Had sixteen or more.
Saw the lights die in McDonough's.
Felt his head hit barroom floor
Woke up filled with sad self pity.
Swore to start anew.
But that's the life in the big city.
The Beatnik is still part of you.
By Bob Fox
A contest entry
- A Tall Tale by pattyann4500.
1150 points, ended July 8, 14 entries
Honorable winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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Excellent
Such great imagery in this poem. It is so true ,
Woke up filled with sad self pity,
Swore to start anew.
But that's the life in the big city.
The Beatnik is still part of you.
I loved that part in how it ended the poem as a whole. Just an excellent poet you are. I was even laughing some for your poem brought different emotions to it for me. Thank you for sharing.
Many Blessings
Much Love
Kelle Marie
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Excellent !
I have drunk too much, taken heavy drugs, met famous mugs and have shrugged at no more hippie stuff. This poem moves me. GREAT WRITE !!! Live on 1960s !
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haha well written..good luck
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This is an exellent piece or penning indeed.Love the imagery and rhyme withinWonderful word play that gives to me a good laugh.Supranatural
Thanks for sharing your talent.
Tony
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Hey Tony
Hi & thanks for understanding my writes & always commenting nicely.
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another great poem from a true writer
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What a cool write!! Loving the tale you penned here Bob.. a really entertaining poem!!
Awesome
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haha that made me laugh...a countrty bumpkin..haha i am one living in the city..lol and things like that happen haha thats why its soooo funny
good work
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oh WOW i LOVE this one! great work! great rhythm, great rhyme, great analogies, great mood! amazing work; i'm bookmarking this one.
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Hey Cool Daddy O
Hehehe, You sure got this one right. I remermber those days. I remember watching Dobie Gillis as a kid thinkiing who are these crazy people. Now they seem quite normal, and mild compared to whats around today. 
They were a peaceful bunch. You should win with this. Thanks for the smiles and keep playing those Bongos.
Sandy
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lol
I saw a few of em in my day,but hey that was waaay back when I was ten? lol
good luck Bob
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this is really cute Bob... I hope you win. What a fun poem. I remember being in Greenwich once. LOVE, prettypoetry ~
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hey, this is really good!
my congrats!
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yes, I remember well
yes, of these days I remember well...used to live with a beatnik, and in many ways was one myself-it's in the blood...and of a special generation that we BOTH have as part of our legacies...and you present this episode so well...weaved ever so gently with a genuine mind and heart...well done...all the best...loved it!
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Oh gal
Ty so much. I wonder does any guy still have that Stetson?
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Aww this is too funny Takes me back a few years! But I think there's a lot of the beatnik in everyone of us!
A fine piece here that takes the reader on a wonderful 'trip'
All the best to you
Gaylene
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A really enjoyable story, flows well. The beatnik is always a part of you, once you ahve it, it never leaves.
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Really enjoyed reading this story-poor old beatnik!!!
Good luck with this one-
xxx Hilly
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Oh this is fun!
What a great piece here Best of luck in the contest.
Delila
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Oh, this is too funny!!! Like most of us, your beatnik just didn't learn a lesson well. I could name a few like that, but I don't want to embarrass myself. You can be this one won't be removed, my friend. Thank you for such a delightful read. Patricia
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