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Summer

She shivered
When she moved in bed,
And the covers
Let in the cold.

It was winter.

But her eyes held him
Like lips
On lips-

And just looking
Made her warmer.

And when he shifted,
And put his arms around her-
And drowsily they became
One warmth,
In two parts-

    Like a play is one story,
    In two parts-

The winter seemed
A feeble tale.

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  • delayedscreening silver member
    August 15
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    lovely

    wonder how it would have read sans the last two stanzas. just my curiosity....


  • stephilou
    July 30

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    I love this. "The winter seemed/A feeble tale"...beautiful. Crazy how when love comes along it can make everything before it seem silly and unimportant. Now all that matters is the warmth felt inside. "And just looking/Made her warmer" Great job!


  • ArtFullyMe gold member
    June 24
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    this gets bigger. seems two then much much more