This corner is my home
It's where I sit and cry
I close my eyes to think
and watch my thoughts go by
This corner is my escape
It's where I remember back
When things were fine and dandy
when I liked color instead of black
This corner is my shelter
even though depression rains down on me
It keeps my heart shut tightly,
but he still has the key
This corner keeps me wondering
if I ever did something wrong
Did I break my own heart...
or was it him all along?
A contest entry
- Picture Prompt by enitsirhC.
370 points, ended July 2, 2008, 13 entries
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Is it too sad-sounding?
Comments
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This is a really good poem!
I would have switched the last 2 lines if I were you..
something like
"Was it he who broke my heart...
Or was it me all along?"
Just because it would have added that "Wow" factor to it.
Keep people thinking
This was wonderful!
Thanks so much for entering my contest!
Good luck!
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Ah! I hate when poems throw out that romantic "there's more going on behind the scenes than I'm telling you" card! It always leaves me curious and wanting more (which is a good thing). And, no, its not too sad sounding, its perfect in its angst and heart wrenching beauty, in form and in meaning. GREAT write!
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That was really sad . . . sob sob. But it was nicely written though. I especially liked "It keeps my heart shut tightly,
but he still has the key
This corner keeps me wondering
if I ever did something wrong
Did I break my own heart...
or was it him all along?" That really made me think. Good job.
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