nighttime fell so hard
She forgot to light the stars
leaving us blinded
Author notes
Goal- Write a haiku about nature using personification.
In a list
A contest entry
- Give me an Awsome Haiku by demon bunny90.
700 points, ended July 3, 2008, 7 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Form Options by poets whisper.
1200 points, ended December 11, 2008, 17 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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I suppose there's two kinds of blinded. One where there's too much light and the other, when there isn't enough. This is very beautiful and I love personification along with a haiku as I don't normally like haiku's so this makes it a lot nicer.
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"she forgot to light the stars" this is lovely
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A lovely sentiment thoughtful and nicely done. Good luck in the contest and happy trails.
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and you goal was certainly achieved here, capturing the essence of senyru and haiku: simplicity, the personification is lovely, and I can certainly enjoy this. I'm very glad to have found you, very nice
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it truly is amazing the effect so few words can have. This poem is so short but it carries alot in it. I love that last line it just ends it so amazingly. Congrats!
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Nice! I didn't know you haiku'ed!
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Me neither
but one day.. I came across this contest, and then, then well you know what happened
Love ya sis
Carrie
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Haiku
I love this short haiku on day and night and its awesome so keep writing because it's good. Thanks for reading my poem!!!
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Gorgeous haiku! An excellent take on nature using personifcation. I'd say your success was well deserved. Thanks for sharing.
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This is a wonderfully written haiku
Splendid imagery, vivid in colour and taste
Congradulation's on the Silver.
Tony
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This is a lovely poem ...
and very nicely done.
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good write I like the idea that the stars must be lit. I live in the city so I rarely see a stary sky, it bugs me because I love stars.
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