Gentle, cold rain falls, as a lonely
Heart calls, beckoning any
Sympathetic ear
To listen
And thoughts of yesterday have all
But slipped away, as the
Last rays of a somber
Dusk, glisten.
A contest entry
- Make me feel it by Dovina.
450 points, ended July 1, 2008, 12 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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:'( what a poignant write... "as the last rays of a somber/Dusk, glisten" my heart bleed a little along the scar of the heartbreaks in my past..well done MJ..
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yes, most definitely a sunset
on a broken heart. will we
ever move on from it? who knows
should have won gold. -
This is definitely heartfelt, it's like losing all hope that anything good will ever happen. Losing memories is not fun, and certainly being alone is not fun either. thanks for your entry
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So sad.. a drifting into darkness... beautifully penned my friend!
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Beautiful but yet with a feeling of sadness closeing in around the heart...reaches in and pulls the tears thank you kindly for sharing with me
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This is lovely and a very good take on the picture provided. I love the meter you created with the rhyme.
Love,
Amera
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this has a nice rhythm ...
yes...sunsets are sad to watch alone..
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Short and bittersweet. Very moving. Best of luck in the contest.
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Your words tug at the heart, maybe there is still a little ray of hope that will appear in the dawn. Well done & good luck Juls
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As the last rays of disapate into the background...so does love. Only to reach the end, of its final act! Good luck in your contest. ~Sie
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Very sad dear, just what the contest host asked for.
Love Margaret
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