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The flames of my heartbeat

As the tears and fears of yesterday
Settle into the past
I'm no longer walking slow and cautious
But I'm running, I'm running fast

So deep into the darkness
I can only wonder what lies ahead
Even though I run alone
I don't feel weak, I am not scared

The fire burns high inside me
And it would take so much more
Than the simple fear of the unknown
To dowse the flames that loudly roar

The strength of my own heartbeat
Will surely guide my way
I will trust myself to see me through
To the brightness of tomorrow's day.

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Prompt - Be not the slave of your own past. Plunge into the sublime seas, dive deep and swim far, so you shall come back with self-respect, with new power, with an advanced experience that shall explain and overlook the old.

Ralph Waldo Emerson


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  • AutumnsFlame
    October 18, 2008

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    Okay, so this didn't really WOW me. The second line in the poem doesn't fit because it is wayyy shorter than the other lines. In the fourth line it seemed like you were trying too hard to make it sound right and have the right number of sylabols, which kind of made it too wordy. The second stanza doesn't rhyme at all, so it doesn't really go with the rest of the poem. The whole thing was just okay for me. You will get better with practice, however, so keep writing! Thank you for entering my contest, but this wasn't exactly what I was looking for.


  • Intricate Wordsmith
    August 20, 2008
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    You must have misread the directions plz reread the section above "Rules"


  • RawrSmileBabyPlz
    June 25, 2008
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    Great. Very Well done.Wow very well written i like it alot. I could picture all the different emotions as i read. Thanks for entering my contest. I wish you the best of luck. ..<3.. Shelly.. ..<3..

  • RawrSmileBabyPlz
    June 25, 2008

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    Great. Very Well done.Wow very well written i like it alot. I could picture all the different emotions as i read. Thanks for entering my contest. I wish you the best of luck. ..<3.. Shelly.. ..<3..


  • Nicada silver member
    June 22, 2008

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    This is a very uplifting poem and you have done a nice job relating to the prompt. I love the message of strength and perseverance in this write. Great job! Thanks for entering and good luck. Blessings, Patty

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