Beside me here is empty space
reserved for dreams come true
Where hidden hopes without a trace
escape my solitude
I count the stars in moonless skies
to quell the urge to pine
O’er loves I’ve lost with tearful eyes
that once were only mine
To be in love is but a chance
to prove the worth of heart
And yet to dream of such romance
I know not where to start
So in that place I’ll drift to sleep
and fly away on wind
To dream the dreams of you and me
and hope they never end
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Wow this is very beautiful. Now you don't have to dream all your dreams came true. As well as mine coming true when I first kissed you.
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Thank you for this entry in our contest, unfortunately you have entered three poems, so I'm afraid we will have to DQ this entry. Sorry about that...Sue
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Leo, if you ever stopped writing romance even your sad ones, you wouldn't be you. If you didn't wear your heart on your sleeve you wouldn't be you. And I for one wouldn't want you any other way. Richard the lion hearted, this is the you you'll always be to be, to me anyway.
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Awww, this is so beautifully sad. I'm sure there are many who share the feeling in this perfect poem. Good luck in the contest, my sweet friend. Patricia
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The world would be a dreary place, were it not for dreamers and poets. Beautiful rhyme, rare sentiment exquisitely stated.
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exquisite
The man with a very old soul.
You could give workshops on how rhyme is "supposed" to be done. Never do your words sound like they are written just to make the words rhyme. Always your words are written from the heart and as though you are speaking them to the woman you love.
Yes...I am quite sure you lived long ago, a Duke perhaps in an age of chivalry. I fear though that the women you were with even then..didn't see the real you...nor give you the love you so deserved.
So very beautiful Leo...
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Good poem Leo. Sorry I haven't been around much.
My life is very busy this time of year. Besides
I can't seem to keep myself in the house.
Thank for being a friend
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So sad. Come on Leo, find a life. Or remember the old one when you use to have fun. I'll bet if you relax and start to smile, you will stumble over a woman who wants to have fun with you. You just need to be happy.
But the poem is good.
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"Loneliness is not so bad when your dream lives hundreds of miles away but when it is at arm's length and still eludes you... it becomes the lyrics of country songs and the subject of poetry." such as this one ... and I must say that your nostalgic poem is in good form and is the beginning of that dream! Good luck in the contest! joy
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I couldn't have said it better myself....thanks for the comment and the applause.
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Easily inspired by a Muse ...
like Cheryl, Leo ... for her work inspires me too!
And, your poem echoes in the hearts of many. What IS it with this world? So broken? Please get your smile back, Leo, and write about a cowboy's joy!
Smooth poetry as always.
Love
Myra
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Awww, what a lovely but sad poem. If this is about you I hope that speial someone comes into your life. And if it isn't about you, you've sure made the feelings of hope and love come through in this superb poem
Good luck in the contest
Dee
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So pretty and romantic. A poet loss looking for love, its lovely Love, C
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You'll probably recognize the title....lol. I borrowed it from you.
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I did lol nice to have some hand in inspiring romance from a sad piece. Love, C
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Excellent
I really like this,It is simple and yet it says so much about loneliness and the need for love.someone to cuddle up to at night and to share your dreams.I hope your dreams come true very soon, Ros
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Great!
I am impressed. You have a great talent and are humble in your acceptance or critique. I love the content of the poem and the longing it conveys.
Once again, good luck in the contest and in your search to fill,
"That empty bed"
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Wow!
This is really good!
I love the second stanza.
Very nice work here
I'd love to read more from you in the future!
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Nice effort Leo!
I can feel the hint of sadness you shared in this. Emotional and quite touching. My best of luck to you in this contest. THANKS LEO!
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Almost perfect
It had me till the "end" which doesn't rhyme with "sand".
How unfortunate, because the rhyme and meter were so perfect till then. How about
"and blow away like like wind?"
Just a suggestion,
Good luck,with my best regards,
Jennifer
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