Yes, I know I lost him to you
and yeah, it hurts like hell
My only comfort is that you're a whore
and as a sixteen year old boy
I cant fault him for wanting something easy
Yes, you really are so hot
but that doesnt give you the right
to grab him by the mouth
when anyone could say
he was mine
I had to wait all these months to get him back
becasue he finally realized I was the one
but it all went downhill when you came around
asking for a second chance
please cant we be friends
After all, I would have doen the same
No, too many girls are like you
manipulative little sluts
who use what tey got to get what they want
no, im too good for that
a second chance?
they dont matter
people dont change
so turn arond
and walk away
I wont say sorry for things I said
forget the forgivness you think
that you deserve because I hurt your feeling
Well screw that I refuse I refuse
To damage my pride for you
I watched him live his dreams
and discover his hopes and wants
ans who he is
and guess what?
NONE OF THEM HAVE ANYTHING TO DO WITH YOU
Yes, I find braggin tacky and low
but I'm a girl, its second nature
so guess what, with your ruby red lips
blonde hair blue eyes
me and my plainess...WE WON
It feels so good to win
to make you miserable
to see the anger in your eyes
and now it is for me
welcome to the buisness of misery
Author notes
BUTTER TOAST!!!! yea...love that show
Misery Buisness by Paramore
I chose this song becuase I can realte...I lost my love to a whore, then had to wait so long to get him back...only to have to deal with her shit
A contest entry
- whootness!! Options!! =D by Technicolor.
300 points, ended July 5, 2008, 10 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Comments
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Wow.. quite a long and detailed poem. I could tell from the title what the song was, I really like that song too.
I can see how easy it is to relate emotions to this poem, the revenge and the devastation of losing someone.
Though I do add, spell check is a wonderful tool. Perhaps a quick edit with it would help your poem.
Exs: (just pointing some out for easier editting.
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what tey got (they)
doesnt (needs an apostrophe.)
cant (same as above)
im (see above above)
braggin (braggin' or bragging.)
have doen the same (done)
ans who he is (and)
doen the same (done)
etc;
Please, in the future, spell check PRIOR to posting a poem. =DD
Thanks and good luck! -
Wow. Obviously a lot of emotion in this poem. I really like it. It makes me feel the victory of sweet revenge. Very nice. Good luck in the contest.
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