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Wings

Precious darling do not cry
Broken wings can learn to fly
I will place you in my nest
Loving care will do the rest.

Tender morsels I will bring
Hoping they will make you sing,
Songs of joy and happiness
As your feathers I caress.

Tears I'll capture as they fall
They become a waterfall
Beautiful, so crisp and clear
I will hold you, have no fear.

We will nestle in the trees
Resting in the gentle breeze
As the healing process starts
With the beating of two hearts.


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  • cricketjeff gold member
    July 16, 2008

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    more sweet loving poetry, we adore your poetry and look forward to every entry so keep them coming please!
    All the best Jeff and Sue

  • Judith Chandler
    June 26, 2008
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    Nice write. I like the flow and the emotion from the other bird -- or could be any mother.


  • Smirnoff Ice
    June 22, 2008
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    this is a lovely gentle piece with a great flow to it.Well done with this one lovely


  • lostinthevoid
    June 22, 2008
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    I like this

    very nice and heart warming piece u have here, nice flow and metaphor..good job..well done!

  • Clare
    June 22, 2008

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    Excellent poem

    Gwenevere, I am delighted by this poem. One of the lovers is the saint as she will take care of her lover to the end of time. She not only places her lover in her own nest, she also vows to feed him ("tender morsels") and caress his feathers. Even when he cries, she will capture them and hold him tight. I can imagine the lover drinking the tears for strength. I especially like the last stanza with your reference to the healing process and the beating of two hearts. I think these two are soul-mates, and if not soul-mates, it's not because the female lover in the poem did not try her best to capture the one she loves by complete attentiveness.

    Clare=user name
    Claire T. Feild=real name


  • ShaShay
    June 22, 2008

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    Excellent

    I love the ebb and flow of thi write. Content and word choice were good. I enjoy a poem that has the lilt of good rhyme. This one did just that.


  • Dorick
    June 22, 2008
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    Good job, good luck in the contest.


  • Rovingone gold member
    June 22, 2008
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    Wonderful, symbolism. This is a charming poem.

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