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Blind Intentions

she walks through my mind, all day.
constantly making me think of her astounding beauty.
Did she think I would fall in love?
Did she know that she would fall in love?
A restless developement that includes,
endless day dreams.
She is beautiful, radient beyond that which I can explain.
She leaves me, the poet gasping for words.
I hope that forever lasts a long time.
That falling apart isn't in our vocabulary.
the world stops spinning when I am away from her.
like living in slow motion.
movements make no sense, I forget to breathe sometimes.
It's like blowing out a candle.
gone in a whiff of smoke.

Oh I'd drop down on my knees any day.
Speak the words she longs, and fears, to hear.

when she smiles it's as if the whole world stops and stares.
Watching her sneak quick glances my way to make sure I really am there.
I know it's crazy,
but she makes my heart beat.
All the lonely memories end when she says my name.
shes like the forbidden fruit,
I live to partake.

My blind intentions lead me onward.
I can't help but follow.
I feel like a brilliant crystal,
reflecting light through a myriad of her.
I long to hold her close.
to whisper delights in her ears.
to go to the ends of the earth.
to conquer in her name.
she like a goddess, rebuking her would be blasphemy.

In the end I follow my blind intentions,
hoping to know eternity,
with the girl with green eyes and red hair.

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  • notorious gold member
    June 22, 2008

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    Lots of typing inconsistencies found here...e.g. the beginning line is not capitalized, the first line of the third stanza is uncapitalized as well

    'radient' should be spelled as 'radiant'

    Lots of imagery, but you seem to rely on cliches to make your point across. e.g. forbidden fruit, it's as if the whole world stops

    I've heard all these things before and I'd really appreciate something new or a remix on the old, and I'm really not getting that with this poem.