Oh God
I discern that you are very generous
and favorable making me fanatical for intending
the relief from you
however,I also comprehend that
you bequeathed me all the proficiencies to
unravel my dilemmas
and this makes to withdraw myself from
upraising my murmur for the arbitration by you
Oh God....
Author notes
Prompt by the host...
Write me a poem about something that you feel inside but you can't really show it because its wrong. That's about it. Basic Rules apply. Be creative.
A contest entry
- How bad do you feel for your thoughts? by Blossom.
330 points, ended July 18, 2008, 12 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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I'm guilty of that too!
I don't think you were fairly judged in this contest... Because what is the worst guilt but to question God? And aren't we all guilty to some degree? But you put it so well! Well my friend as usual you blow me away with your talent so humbly given back to God!
Regards,
Jennifer
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Superb
A most unique, and enigmatic write. However, I quite like it just the way it is. Indirectly, it reminds me of one I wrote called: Om (Aum). If you care to read it, here's a link to it: http://allpoetry.com/poem/2701806 -
realization that He 'bequeath me all the proficiencies to unravel my dilemmas' and to withdraw from seeking arbitration is the essence of our struggle and the positive way one can go about doing things on his own than to be eternally idle / or waiting for something to happen by chance.
very simple message conveyed in a cryptic way.
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Great message to your reader my friend..written with so much wisdom. great job
Ruby
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I like the flowing prose on display here. Thanks for the renewed message on the theme of God.
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Nicely done... you've captured your feelings beautifully in your flowing prose... Well done...
Ken
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A universal trait you have written here, my friend, and beautifully so. Thanks for sharing it here, from one who often thinks too deeply from her brain when she should just be still and know. Best of luck in the contest. Peace, Rhonda
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Good work on this one!
I liked the message you wrote in this. Very well done and the prompt is excellent. Good luck in the contest. THANKS!!
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