A Passionate Fire
Your Hearts soul desire
Half Empty, Needing to be full
Searching for what exceeds that rule
Searching for that very cause
Chasing after those dreams in alternate reality
A contest entry
- 30 Words Never Sounded So Beautiful. by Poetryintheblood.
450 points, ended July 6, 2008, 15 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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Thank you for your beautiful entry, good luck in my contest, Josie
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Not trying to be annoying
But maybe you should change "soul" to "sole"
since it would make more sense
And the last line to "Finally receiving its sought after applause"
.. just because it might help with the "flow" of the poem, if you know what I mean.
It's up to you, don't think I'm trying to make you change it.
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