Through the blood and the tears
A soldier falls to her knees
She is wounded and fading
The visions around her grow foggy
Alongside muffled sounds of anguish
Only one noise breaks the barrier
Soft, desperate sobs ring in her ears
She knows not of their owner
Until she feels her own heaving chest
And her tears mixing with blood on her cheek
She's so tired of this fight
Of battles she can never win
The monsters she faces are too strong
She looks for way out
For some way to end this torment
But still she finds so escape
She took a one-way train here
The ticket, forced into her hand
But a ticket back has a price
A price she is not willing to pay
Another blow is taken
And she is struck to the ground
But it is the last blow she will take
As she kneels there, sobbing
A realization of the truth occurs
No longer will she bear it
She may have been knocked her knees
But the only way to end the pain
Is to rise back up
And stand tall
A contest entry
- That was you? Omg I'm sorry ( For Everyone :] ) by TheUglySceneGirl....
450 points, ended June 24, 54 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Just give me your overall opinion of it. Be brutal
Comments
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Beautiful
It kind of sounds like my daily struggle against the daily name-calling and bullshit, I've got to learn to keep walking and hold my head high. I'm sorry if it sounds totally out there, but that's how I interpret it. All in all, it's a beautiful poem, don't change a thing.
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Very emotional
You wrote this poem very well and put a lot of time in it. I think it is more of a metaphor the soldier is really you, Tell me if I'm wrong. But over all outstanding poem and emotional. I wish all people in general had that much courage ...
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yes, the soldier is me. at first I was going to put that in at the end, but I desided not to.
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Aw.. this is kinda sad it made me cry. Its very well written and i like it alot. My favorite part is when you said "Through the blood and the tears" that was worded so greatly. Thanks for entering my contest. I wish you the best of luck ..<3.. Shelly
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