You want to sip me
slowly
a sunset cocktail
that melts
onto your tongue
with tropical
flavors
of orange and lime
and a cool slice
of pale blue moon...
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PROMPT: Have You Forgotten How Good Dalaney Tastes?
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- The Great Slogan Challenge by lowercase prelude.
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different
sounds like your making yourself into a drink... I'm not sure I like this one.. -
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It was the prompt...a bit self-indulgent, but fun
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wow! yeah..
A very tasty thought indeed..
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Oh! I am craving a Dalaney right now! The way you described how it melts on your on your tongue and how you used colours in the tastes was simple amazing in its simplicity. Good job!
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yummy
Clear and clean.
And perhaps a bit minty.
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Excellent
You want to sip me
slowly
a sunset cocktail
that melts
onto your tongue
Always liked your style of writing
Well said within the limits of words
Rick
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MMMmmm... Heavy on the 'blue moon' please!
Delicious
Sol
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I could never forget the taste of a delicious Sex on the Beach. Bravo!
Love,
Amera♥
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wow!
;-)
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O yes, more then a pretty face.
Joe
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Just reading this is delicious.
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very creative, sort of seductive. i like it. nice take on your slogan.
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Reading this has made me very very thirsty!!!!
Brill write babes-I thirst for more!!!
xxx Hilly
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Awesome Lanie-girl!...can feel this, taste this, savor the flavor...any man would be the lucky one..to have a thirst and sip of this...you inspire me....
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sipping won't slake this thirst, I need more, more, more!!
Wonderful.
Rory
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A rather scintillating take
On the Slogan you have there-
Already envisioning
It on taxies, busses and inside
Subway cars in Manhattan.
Summer solstice moon
Rises large and full
Inebriating senses
With liquid starlight
Born of one’s dream time
Their heart’s walk- a-bout
Len
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*slaps down empty glass breathless*
May I have another glass please?
Paul
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To be sipped and savoured at any time of day, the taste that tingles
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beber es precioso.
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Creative!
On the white sand of the tropics with palm oil in streams and the refreshing taste of Delaney to send my senses streaming in ecstacy out living the dream. Outstanding Lane!!!! Don
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...PK
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Guzzling forbidden, my Lady
I have sipped you for almost 2 years and only want a lifetime more.
PERFECT
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fruity always works but maybe you are impying your exotic when basked in your full flourencent-splender hmmm I'll have to ponder that for a bit dreamy!
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One of many permutations of a wonder.
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lol Yes this is exactly what I would have thought for you dear lady. Love, Cheryl
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