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urgency


I want you all impatient
and serious, our bodies against

one another as if in a small closet.
I want to mess your hair in a mat of
hard kisses, squat to take a long lick
of your thigh before the deep throat
of guilty conscience swallows us;
before regret slides in beside my
panties faster than you.































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  • bwm
    September 2
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    The rush to experience before you start feeling the guilt--What was the cause of the guilt?.
    Very well done.
    bw


  • kaibab silver member
    August 29
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    Holy cow!!!!.... Yhis ia such an ominous metaphor...and so very powerful...congrats to you my friend


  • Lj-
    August 28
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    You made these words come across as urgent; very impressive.
    Sexy-ish write.

    Thank you for your entry,
    Best of luck!

  • Yvette Champ
    July 30

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    Oh my, this certainly impresses urgency and imagery upon the page,powerful and passionate poetry dearest poetess.

  • aidenspektor
    July 13

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    Wow. This is very....racy (is that the word), but I think it's very tastefully done, there wasn't really antyhing that was uncofmortable about reading it for me. Nice phrasing, as always, and I love how you can give such short pieces such layers of meaning. It truly is impressive.


  • GreenHrtPaleMoon gold member
    July 13

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    This piece is not just another erotica, it is a classy and deep sensual poem. You bring about several powerful emotions in very short amount of space. It takes a brilliant poet to be able to do that. Bravo!


  • cubesix
    July 12

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    I havent read a truly erotic piece in what feels like years.. Thank you for changing that.

    The second half of the poem is exceptional. I wish my boyfriend was home right now......

  • kiwigirljacks gold member
    July 9
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    Wow! Love this! Very steamy with suggestion !!

  • celadia
    July 3
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    steamy, you should be on the radio with this stuff, it's great.

  • MariGoes gold member
    June 29

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    I simply loved it!!!

    'before the deep throat
    of guilty conscience swallows us'

    what a line!

  • Melissa Gayle gold member
    June 29
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  • Nangaleema
    June 27

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    I might come back later to comment... after I regain consciousness. lol.

    this is very hot. I love the first line - the mood it sets. it brings to mind images like the guy concentrating on buttons and unbuttoning, becoming impatient and just yanking the thing open sending them flying...

    I think I'm gonna go splash some cold water on my face... anyway - great poem! - Mary Jo


  • Harrisham Minhas
    June 24
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    That's naughty and well-expressed.


  • one dismal day
    June 24

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    this is a textbook example of how a title should compliment a poem.

    This is a great piece March, I can't believe it took me this long to comment.


  • Jersene silver member
    June 24
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    I love the ending...definitely has that feeling of urgency.


  • philosphyofkate
    June 23
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    oh my. it's good for me to remember these things.

  • Yellowdogpoetry gold member
    June 23
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    Nicely written Tara. Not a word out of place. Beautifully titled. Geo


  • delightfulmess silver member
    June 23

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    Oh I love this the title sums this up perfectly.
    Great ending! Love this one.

    Best of luck in the contest.


    Delila

  • Virgoan
    June 22

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    Erotic and beautifully dirty. The sound and the sense of secrecy is very intimate and moving.

    I wish to be in that closet too...lol

    Keep sharing


  • storiesuntold gold member
    June 22

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    Good write here

    Yes the fantisies of the mind often if left unbridaled plays out and the aftermath weighs on the heart .Good write here


  • zochit2me gold member
    June 22

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    gulps really hard...leaves with urgency



    ☼Becky☼


  • Pure Thought silver member
    June 22
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    Yup, that's urgent.

    Great imagery, I got a feeling of urgency reading this. Think I'll read again.


  • ardentMarch gold member
    June 22
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    lolol...sorry about your pacemaker John..lol

    ..thank you....

  • mtpoet
    June 22
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    Great ending...


  • Tennessee-Joe silver member
    June 22
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    Hot

    Hotter then August, in Texas!
    Joe

  • Thomas Scott gold member
    June 22

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    This is dynamite. It has the urgency and the rhythm of the subject matter. I'll be keeping an eye on you, for sure.
    Thanks for doing it to us.

    Tom


  • Suzanne Dia gold member
    June 22

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    Ahem.

    This is gorgeous.

    Think I lived this one at some point in my life.

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