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urgency

 

 

I want you all impatient and serious,

our bodies against one another

as if in a small closet.

I want to mess your hair in a mat of hard kisses,

squat to take a long lick of your thigh

before the deep throat

of guilty conscience swallows us;

before regret slides inside my panties

faster than your frisson.































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  • Thomas Scott gold member
    October 23
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    LONG LIST


  • kristian 28
    July 29

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    when all the colors merge into one,it usualy comes out as gray,with this i feel as if colors continually changed in the picture,as if i saw the same pictures in million colors,that is in million variations,try to fit the time in to this,i mean it has a deeper meaning,deeper than i´d ever thought ..


  • thepoetssoul
    February 23

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    Wow this is fiery hot what a piece of erotic poetry.
    Splendidly written in vivid colour and taste
    Be blessed in all you do.

    Tony


  • Swangrnv gold member
    January 25

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    wow

    ouch , ouch ouch!!! i keep burning my damn fingers on keyboard.. this is hot..

  • Yvette Champ gold member
    October 7, 2008

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    Oh my, well worth re reading, the sense of urgency that you impress upon the page is never going to change, forever and ever amen, this moment in time is captured akin to a framed frisson...


  • Thoughts-of-Soloman
    September 17, 2008

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    Wow... love the way you've caught the 'rush'!

    Moments that kill thinking but it's still heard from not far away, complaining that it should be back in place to make all decisions.

    Should it? Shouldn't it?
    Each to their own I reckon.

    Sol


  • The Drifter
    September 2, 2008

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    The rush to experience before you start feeling the guilt--What was the cause of the guilt?.
    Very well done.
    bw


  • kaibab silver member
    August 29, 2008

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    Holy cow!!!!.... Yhis ia such an ominous metaphor...and so very powerful...congrats to you my friend


  • Lj-
    August 28, 2008

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    You made these words come across as urgent; very impressive.
    Sexy-ish write.

    Thank you for your entry,
    Best of luck!

  • Yvette Champ gold member
    July 30, 2008
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    Oh my, this certainly impresses urgency and imagery upon the page,powerful and passionate poetry dearest poetess.

  • aidenspektor
    July 13, 2008

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    Wow. This is very....racy (is that the word), but I think it's very tastefully done, there wasn't really antyhing that was uncofmortable about reading it for me. Nice phrasing, as always, and I love how you can give such short pieces such layers of meaning. It truly is impressive.


  • Age of Rain
    July 13, 2008

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    This piece is not just another erotica, it is a classy and deep sensual poem. You bring about several powerful emotions in very short amount of space. It takes a brilliant poet to be able to do that. Bravo!


  • cubesix
    July 12, 2008

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    I havent read a truly erotic piece in what feels like years.. Thank you for changing that.

    The second half of the poem is exceptional. I wish my boyfriend was home right now......


  • kiwigirljacks gold member
    July 9, 2008
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    Wow! Love this! Very steamy with suggestion !!

  • celadia
    July 3, 2008
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    steamy, you should be on the radio with this stuff, it's great.


  • Mari Goes gold member
    June 29, 2008

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    I simply loved it!!!

    'before the deep throat
    of guilty conscience swallows us'

    what a line!

  • Melissa Gayle gold member
    June 29, 2008
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  • Nangaleema
    June 27, 2008

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    I might come back later to comment... after I regain consciousness. lol.

    this is very hot. I love the first line - the mood it sets. it brings to mind images like the guy concentrating on buttons and unbuttoning, becoming impatient and just yanking the thing open sending them flying...

    I think I'm gonna go splash some cold water on my face... anyway - great poem! - Mary Jo


  • Harrisham Minhas gold member
    June 24, 2008
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    That's naughty and well-expressed.


  • monstruo
    June 24, 2008

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    this is a textbook example of how a title should compliment a poem.

    This is a great piece March, I can't believe it took me this long to comment.


  • Jersene gold member
    June 24, 2008
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    I love the ending...definitely has that feeling of urgency.


  • philosphyofkate silver member
    June 23, 2008
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    oh my. it's good for me to remember these things.

  • dx d by me
    June 23, 2008
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    Nicely written Tara. Not a word out of place. Beautifully titled. Geo


  • delightfulmess silver member
    June 23, 2008

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    Oh I love this the title sums this up perfectly.
    Great ending! Love this one.

    Best of luck in the contest.


    Delila

  • Virgoan
    June 22, 2008

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    Erotic and beautifully dirty. The sound and the sense of secrecy is very intimate and moving.

    I wish to be in that closet too...lol

    Keep sharing


  • storiesuntold gold member
    June 22, 2008

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    Good write here

    Yes the fantisies of the mind often if left unbridaled plays out and the aftermath weighs on the heart .Good write here


  • zochit2me gold member
    June 22, 2008

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    gulps really hard...leaves with urgency



    ☼Becky☼


  • Pure Thought silver member
    June 22, 2008
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    Yup, that's urgent.

    Great imagery, I got a feeling of urgency reading this. Think I'll read again.


  • mtpoet
    June 22, 2008
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    Great ending...


  • Cup-a-Joe
    June 22, 2008
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    Hot

    Hotter then August, in Texas!
    Joe


  • Thomas Scott gold member
    June 22, 2008

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    This is dynamite. It has the urgency and the rhythm of the subject matter. I'll be keeping an eye on you, for sure.
    Thanks for doing it to us.

    Tom

  • Suzanne Dia
    June 22, 2008

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    Ahem.

    This is gorgeous.

    Think I lived this one at some point in my life.

  • silverfish
    June 22, 2008

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    i cannot comment on this poem until the smoke clears from the area of my head that once had hair and eyebrows. -scorchedfish


  • Heart Sutra
    June 21, 2008

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    This has some excellent swish and edge to it.
    I really like this one Tara.


  • AJ Morelli gold member
    June 21, 2008

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    a truly brilliant poem, one of your finest writes, if not your finest... i haven't looked at the other entries in the contest but its hard to believe there is anything close to this...imho

    best luck in the contest but you have already won by writing this, everything else is just gravy


    al


  • apples fell
    June 21, 2008

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    This is erotica without harshness or being thrusted into things. It feels more airy and delicate. Certainly you craft a message that is one you can lightly tap. Quiet like. No crits, not that I can see at least. I really like this format you've been playing with lately. It's very square and yet, the emotions are not. Sometimes poetically we need to have lots of sex. And sometimes not poetically we need to have lots of sex.

    Loved this very much.

    ;


  • arafura gold member
    June 21, 2008
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    That IS urgent! Very erotic my friend... you made my pacemaker skip a beat. BRAVO!

    • tara wilson gold member
      June 22, 2008
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      lolol...sorry about your pacemaker John..lol

      ..thank you....


  • Mad Moon silver member
    June 21, 2008

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    Whew...! Brilliant! One of the best "adults" I've read in a looong time, my friend. Perfectly penned! ....pant...pant.... Just WOW!


  • Swan song gold member
    June 21, 2008
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    Oh man this is so true I would imagine you just sent me on a sensual whirlwind!!!


  • CaliOkie silver member
    June 21, 2008

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    Erotic guilt. Wow. You mixed these in just the right portions so that they balance each other out beautifully. What a wonderful ambiguity of feeling you inspire. Excellent.

    Garrison


  • faderman1959
    June 21, 2008

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    The more guilt! The better it must feel! Sinful pleasures I would say!


  • MJ Donnelly gold member
    June 21, 2008

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    Hot, hot, hot! Tara, have you been feeding your muse dark chocolate again? LOL! All the best in the contest dear friend.


    Love and peace always,
    Mj


  • Danny Beatty gold member
    June 21, 2008

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    this is really neat and cool and hot ... the technical aspects are left way behind and even though they are perfect, as all effective and potent small poems are, something else begins to dawn upon the reader ...

    just plain urgency ... lord, this is sexy



    dang


  • Kiran silver member
    June 21, 2008

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    Passionate with the emotion of love and regret described so well! This was amazingly written! Well done with this.


  • Dalaney gold member
    June 21, 2008
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    I like this. A LOT. lol....damn, girl.
    Love, Lane


  • Catie Sheeran gold member
    June 21, 2008

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    OMG! this is sooo good! a lot of strong passion in this...and about the regret and guilt - you delievered that well..."before we're swallowed
    into the deep throat of guilty conscience;
    before regret slides in beside my
    panties faster than you" I love those lines!


  • paulcreates silver member
    June 21, 2008

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    ...I would comment here...but I'm too impatient and serious...

    Paul


  • Nicolette gold member
    June 21, 2008

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    Regret is such a restricting thing

    Girl, i need some of this urgent slipping-and-sliding too, lol - urgently...a woman shouldn't read this alone


    Great poetry - you do write erotica well!

    ~ Nicolette


  • Randomly Beautiful
    June 21, 2008
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    Oh my...I've felt that way a time or two.


  • poeticweaver gold member
    June 21, 2008

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    Excellent Erotica,

    I really enjoyed this piece you have inscribed my friend. *hug*
    Thanks for sharing with us all here, and congrates on a wonderful write. :D

    (I might use bow instead of squat though. LOL. :p

    Love Timothy :f

     

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