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With strange and random thoughts upon my mind
while all that I am searching for is rest,
no sense, no format I can ever find
as though my life is one gigantic test.

It seems that I have had more than my share
of problems as they occupy my years,
at every twist and turn they’re always there
with burdens that will add to all my fears.

Today it is a struggle just to cope,
emotions in my life are pulled apart,
there’s blackness all around, I find no hope,
no love that I can place within my heart.

      Tomorrow though will be a brand new day
      the darkness lifts and I may want to stay.
 

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  • z etoile
    June 25, 2008
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    Great write I like the feeling of hope at the end.


  • arafura gold member
    June 21, 2008

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    "Tomorrow though will be a brand new day
    the darkness lifts and I may want to stay."

    I understand too well where these feeling stem from. Wonderfully well written my friend!


  • XxunBeautifulxX
    June 21, 2008
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    Wonderfull


  • Dalaney gold member
    June 21, 2008
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    Love, Lane


  • Wayne Leon Learmond
    June 21, 2008

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    Very very sad this piece is. Very heavy indeed. Such weight of worry and fear pushing this poem along. Dark, deep and powerful. Your emotions poured through here Sue. Very well-written indeed.

    With
    Dark
    Love
    Wayne Leon
    x


  • cricketjeff gold member
    June 21, 2008

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    A new Queen of the sonnet arrives!
    One on the front page of AP in the spotlight as a tribute to you mum, and a much darker and more introspective poem here, subtle volta and beautifully hopefful couplet, well written Sue


  • moonbumps silver member
    June 21, 2008

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    Worth waiting for-just had to hang on to read this-
    this write makes me love you more and I want so much to hug you tight-I'm here for you-
    Blessings and love to you and this telling write-
    xxx Hilly xxx

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