the edge of time
lightyears
from reality
A contest entry
- Haiku III by Kelli Marie.
2250 points, ended June 27, 2008, 33 entries
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Comments
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Cool!
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I think you caught and beautifully expressed the idea that much of our perception of reality is based on present perspective and personal experience. I wonder how that would hold up, contemplated from another sphere, nearer the edge of time?
Great piece to think on, in the evening, from the stargazer's porch!
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I like where you took this, I do think light-years should have a hyphon between the light and years. Still, a good piece. Thank you for entering.
Kelli -
The whole sweep of space/time in a few well-chosen words--excellent! It may not follow the rules of traditional haiku, but personally I don't care, it's a good poem, haiku or not.
Good luck,
Bill
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Oooo, nice joining of time, distance, rate of speed and where ever reality is.
Marlene -
I like the words, but not so much the poem as a whole.
It's a great statement, but doesn't follow the rules of Haiku.
Good luck in the contest. -
Light years, they still send us their guiding light! Might be too far reality to understand for mankind! Wonderful haiku! ~Sie
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