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Dawn

Sun breaches
the precipice of time.
firey hands slide
slowly, stroking
across a dream land
dripping with spiders webs
and drowsy trees
all caressed in ruby,
and ornamented with gold.

A contest entry

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  • Poetryintheblood gold member
    July 6, 2008

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    Thank you for your beautiful entry, good luck in my contest, Josie


  • thepoetsings
    June 22, 2008

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    Absolutely beautiful, the entire thing. I don't know what my favorite part is (because it's all so good), but I think I might favor those first two lines. Good luck!