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Hiding in the skies.

I let this handful of petals fall
 red that matches the fury,

  exploding from my heart
   Shocked, 
    first time you gave such a sweet
     gift of love
      they were used as a tool,

       to push me away.
      Crushed 

     I will hibernate until, I can

    bear the maturity
   in learning from your mistakes.
  Somehow,

 I'll manage a transition
from anguish

                    to growth.

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Pic credit -- Sweet Oblivion by Wildfire2003

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  • Tattboyspet
    June 23, 2008

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    we should ALL learn from others (as well as our own) mistakes - you have taken inspiration from the image and not the title (which most (including me at times!) do!)
    well done on a wonderful take on the prompt!


  • Angelflower
    June 22, 2008

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    Wow.. this is just amazing.. I really loved this sissy.. It's a beautiful picture and you did it justice.. More then that I think.. This was just full of so much emotion.. I really loved it. Best of luck sissy..



    Angel


  • Weltt
    June 22, 2008

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    That picture is gorgeous and your words were something even more than that. Beautifully flowing thoughts across the page! You always pour such emotion into your writes. Really leave an impact on the reader. Best of luck !!!!!!


  • SuicidalLover
    June 21, 2008

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    Well this is wonderful my precious *doggie* (hehe did I get that right, lol?) So full of emotions. I wish you luck!
    ~Kystal Angel

    • MaMa-2-be-Cindy
      June 21, 2008
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      Aw Thanks U got it right

      Miss ya, know I have like a ton of your poems to catch up on and promise I will soon

      *love * ur


  • KayJay
    June 21, 2008

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    Wonderfully full of emotion... the form is superb for supporting your message... and the hope it contains... Well done...
    Ken


  • x-Black-Butterfly-x gold member
    June 21, 2008

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    awww sis this is a beautiful write that is written with such a peaceful and amazing piece. i absoltuly love the emotions and the way it flows so gently to fit the picture. truly beautoiful well done


  • luna-midnight gold member
    June 21, 2008

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    awwww oohhhhh...niceness
    this is awesome, i thought youd liek this pic
    wonderful write, and good luck
    take care, thanks for entering, and hope you had fun!


    • MaMa-2-be-Cindy
      June 21, 2008

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      went for powerful, glad you liked it, thanks tis an awesome pic, like your an awesome sister


  • luna-midnight gold member
    June 21, 2008
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    yay

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