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Alone with Tears

late at night i open my eyes,
staring at the dark sky outside.
as the day ends this night,
can't help my self to look back my life.

i want to think happy thoughts,
but my ego plays the sad songs.
how darkness covers my whole being,
feeling alone and lonely in the dark.

begin to have worries behind my mind,
think of tomorrow with fear and teary eyes.
how sadness captures me with this lonely night,
wishing that someone will be here for a hug.

sometimes i still dwell with the tears of the past,
start to cover my face with pillow and begin to cry.
how heavy this heart i am carrying inside,
but i know God is there above looking at me now.

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  • innocence jaded.xx
    July 7, 2008

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    This piece was just full of emotions. It was like a bittersweet sadness, almost, and I loved that =)

    "i want to think happy thoughts,
    but my ego plays the sad songs.
    how darkness covers my whole being,
    feeling alone and lonely in the dark."

    Amazing. My favorite stanza. Thank you for entering & best of luck to youuu ! ♥


  • Nicada silver member
    July 4, 2008

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    This poem is packed with powerful and painful emotions. This seems to be the other side of solitude, which is loneliness. It seems many feel lonely in their solitude. This is an honest write about the darkness of pain and loneliness. Thanks for entering my contest. Blessings, Patty


  • Play-A-War
    June 25, 2008
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    It's a good write.

    You expressed your self well.

    Thanks for entering.

    Good luck


  • Quill Bill
    June 25, 2008
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    we all feel down some times, but without the bad times we wouldn't enjoy the good times so much.


  • A-Daisy-Among-Roses
    June 22, 2008
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    This is a very honest piece. Despair and hope paired together throughout. The way you describe how haunting ones past can be is nearly flawless. The ending line is heart warming but is out of pace with the rest of the poem, it seems to step out of the flow you have going. but other than that great write


  • RawrSmileBabyPlz
    June 22, 2008
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    Wow this is a amazing write worded so great. Very well written my favorite part is when you said "sometimes i still dwell with the tears of the past," that was worded so good. thanks for entering my contest i wish you the best of luck ..<3.. Shelly

  • Perfect Insanity
    June 21, 2008

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    I truly felt this piece..it is very raw, and honest. Very few people place themselves out there like this. I can feel the pain, desperation and hopelessness between your lines. Many a time I have felt this way. Where darkness envelops you and does not let go. One must sorround themselves with things you like... attempt a bit of joy from the smallest things. A soggy pillow is not very comfortable... What I truly like of this poem is the end. Very negative and well expressed, to then see that last line. As I read your poem I myself felt with no hope...to then see that last line. It is true ...God is staring down... can he help?

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