Step...

My mind twisted in virginal confusion

and here I stand...

~confused~

~alone and bitter~

With one foot on the floor and the other...

~hovering~

...between heaven and the abyss...

Will I find peace and love?

Will I ever smile?

Or will I be picked up and thrown

back down with all your Holy force...

"...I love you..!"

So why do I hurt so?

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8-pic credit:Butterflies and Hurricanes by ~Aerelin

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penman
June 28, 2008
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Wonderful
Very creative and well written. A nice take on the prompt.
Riftkin
June 24, 2008

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poetic beauty here
wondering if the step off
would be worth it or not

for even though the love is there
pain and doubt is too

you did an outstanding job here

best of luck to you

Riftkin
Angelflower
June 22, 2008

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Bravo brother!!! you did a wonderful job.. You really pulled a lot of emotion out of that picture... I sure as hell wouldn't have been able to do that.. Anyway.. I really liked this.. best of luck!

Angel
x-Black-Butterfly-x
June 21, 2008
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wow dad this is an amazing write that really captures the picture and the way you add a voice to it is both gripping and inspriing.its a powerful write indeed well done and best of luck to you
x-Black-Butterfly-x
June 21, 2008

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wow dad this is an amazing write that really captures the picture and the way you add a voice to it is both gripping and inspriing.its a powerful write indeed well done and best of luck to you
Poetic Tasha
June 21, 2008

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oye! nice Si! i like where you went with this picture, definaely even identified with it alot. especially the last lines:

I love you! so why do i hurt so?

big hugs to you
Tasha
luna-midnight
June 21, 2008

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lovely background and write, its very different, and sad.
thanks for entering, and i hope you had fun!
take care and good luck
stephanie