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Pathfinder

I thought to walk where paths would not be found

without a journey’s end or course in mind,

but in the sand of stark and broken ground

another’s print was left for me to find.

I’d thought to pass where none had ever been,

yet here was proof of someone else’s step.

Though whims directed where my path should wend,

it was upon a trail another left.

 

As water runs, it finds its winding way

until it pools in ponds or lakes or sea.

In streams that seem to wander as they may,

it follows courses drawn by gravity.

The fullest, rushing flood is yet constrained

to flow in paths where least resistance stands.

Wherever water flows a bed remains

that will direct another flow again.

 

In my imagination concepts formed

which seemed original, unique to me.

I thought I’d ventured far beyond the norm

until I read the same philosophy.

I realized that even private thoughts

are guided by some common, shared design.

Although originality I sought,

I stumbled on the paths of other minds.

 

Within this world the path one takes or makes

will cross the mark of someone else’s tread.

The scattered rains and snowfall’s wafting flakes

shall find in time their streams and riverbeds.

The varied intellects of humankind

replenish wisdom’s ancient watersheds.

Our feet or streams of consciousness we find

have gone unconsciously where others led.

Author notes

However far I wander from the beaten path, eventually I cross the trace of another’s passing. Just so, regardless of the emotional spring or stream of consciousness from which it may rise, I find no direction of thought, intensity of feeling or flight of poetic fancy where others have not passed before me. Yet thoughts and feelings, experiences and discoveries are no less my own for having been known by others. Each and all are unique in our individual amalgamations of life experience, but together we comprise the ever-flowing stream of humanity. Not so surprisingly, the planned or aimless courses on which we find ourselves seem at times to be paths foreordained by our collective consciousness and history.
  
  
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  • catstar
    October 12

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    Amazing. You really leave the reader thinking. This is a very thought provoking piece and I look forward to reading more of you work. Thank you for entering and good luck in the contest.


  • katie marie silver member
    June 30
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    Loved the thoughts expressed here so beautifully.


  • liltulip gold member
    February 24

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    wow

    this is gold for sure, i love this very much, both the theme of the pathfinder taking a journey but of the words you used to describe it, thank you for sharing this!

  • Topnotchsy
    February 21

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    This is beautiful, and I enjoyed reading it. I was looking at your page recently (after noticing your comment on one of my poems, and seeing the way it was written) and you are truly an asset to this site with your beautiful poetry, and the way you comment on poems thoughtfully and sincerely.


    • Peripatetic gold member
      February 22

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      Well, thank you very much. I do not comment enough. One reason for this is that I do try to leave only comments which are thoughtful and sincere but most of all supportive. The comments I receive, even the critical ones, encourage me and help me to improve my writing. I hope my comments for others have the same effect.

      • Topnotchsy
        February 22
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        I'm definitely of the opinion that a well thought out, helpful comment is worth far more than a half dozen "nice poem" comments. I will often comment on a poem of someone who commented on mine to show my appreciation, but I also try to take the time to go through a poem I like slowly, and really see if there's something I can offer the poet in the way of a critique. We are all (I assume) trying to get better at writing, so any little push in that direction is always great!!


  • second-born
    January 16

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    Hi...Í just judged my recent contest and you emerged as a winner...and when I viewed your profile...I was intrigued by this beautiful poem...and definitely I had no regrets about it..this personal poem is so beautiful and I think all people could relate to it...very philosophical yet it was written with so wit...very lovely!!! God bless always dear poet!


  • Molassis
    January 11

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    Just WOW... I could rant and rave about how perfect this is but I feel that I still couldn't do this justice...

    I was completely caught up in your every word.

    ~Melissa


  • FransB gold member
    January 2

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    I have enjoyed

    what I read, and more so the introduction on your page. There is much in it of me! Glad I found your page. Frans

    Oh, sorry, this poem speaks strength, dream and reality.

    Frans


  • heismysong
    November 20, 2008

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    The Depth and Beauty of Verse...

    ... is what I find in this poem!

    I love the form, the rhyme, and the well-constructed theme, with all its rivulets of thought. It was not choppy, had no poor grammar...

    You deserved that gold!

    Thanks for stopping by my page, so that I could be introduced to a new kindred spirit!


  • Susan John Francis
    November 14, 2008

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    WOW!! nicely written.. A path which we all want to find and it to be unique. Well versed thoughts.
    Love Susan


  • Lowell Poe
    October 26, 2008

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    There are men that travel the paths you speak of.
    Finding out that the lonesome trail of thought
    that went out like a radio wave,
    intersecting with the fellow travelers ,
    that you were unaware of.
    Outstanding!
    Now that I have read your work,
    your thoughtful and articulate comment is valued ten fold.

    Peace alway brother,
    Lowell Poe.

    • Peripatetic gold member
      October 26, 2008
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      I love it when the comments from others are bits of poetry in themselves!

      I have seen your screen name in contests and comments, but I had not read your work until this contest came up. I look forward to turning often to your page for your reflections and musings.

      Ben

  • davidwright silver member
    October 23, 2008

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    If you were a man alone with no other beings to influence your thoughts would you think or question what you see. Good write gives me pause to consider my own journey. Thanks for being a contestant and happy trails


  • Lamia
    August 9, 2008

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    First, congrats on the trophy. It was well deserved. This poem reminded me of a saying my Granddad always told me: "Those who think they have original ideas don't have a good sense of history." This poem was easy to read but lovely to comprehend the more I delved in.
    "In my imagination concepts formed
    Which seemed original, unique to me.
    I thought I’d ventured far beyond the norm
    Until I read the same philosophy."
    That was my favourite bit, because I've had that happen way too often haha.
    Thank you for commenting on my poem by the way


  • Darkwell
    August 5, 2008

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    i get it that no matter if you journey somewhere or write something or have a idea thats already been one or been there it doesnt make your journey or write or idea a less thing it just adds to the world and its future goes on. were all walking over other peeps prints.

    I thought I’d ventured far beyond the norm
    Until I read the same philosophy.
    I realized that even private thoughts
    Are guided by some common, shared design.
    Although originality I sought,
    I stumbled on the paths of other minds.

    im sure other peeps wanna do the same things i wanna do with nanobots but it doesnt mean im not original for wanting to too. this piece made me think alot about how important and how much more we can do too when we share our thoughts even if what we think already got thought. Wicked

    • Peripatetic gold member
      August 5, 2008
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      even if what we think already got thought

      "how much more we can do too when we share our thoughts even if what we think already got thought."
      You are the wicked one! Do you just think poetically naturally, or do you have to work on these wonderful bon mots!?

      "Their human ingenuity was shared,
      So innovations now could be reviewed,
      Developed and refined.
      Improvements in technology accrued,
      And cultural complexity advanced."

      Your comment reflects one of my thoughts in a very long narrative poem of the history of humankind.


  • BellaD
    July 18, 2008

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    The concept here is a good one. A number of possible interpretations...that nothing that happens to us is really unique, that others have undergone the same experiences or trials, that lives of all intertwine in ways we don't anticipate or imagine...gives the reader something to think about. Flows nicely. I particularly liked the following lines:
    I realized that even private thoughts

    Are guided by some common, shared design.

    Although originality I sought,

    I stumbled on the paths of other minds.



    Great job and congrats on the Gold.


    • Peripatetic gold member
      July 19, 2008
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      Ah, Bella! You are the first person to note the heart of the poem!


  • Swordman
    July 16, 2008

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    Beautiful Wisdom

    This poem really speaks to me, which is saying quite a bit, as so few do. Not only does it have great imagery, of which formed a clear picture in my mind, but the meaning behind it is very insightful. Very well written.

    • Peripatetic gold member
      July 16, 2008
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      This is my signature poem. It is related to my username from the Greek 'peripatein' meaning 'to walk around' with the philosophical connotation of seeking wisdom and truth through consideration of observed phenomena.
      My path is much more interesting for the streams of consciousness I encounter and the traces of others whose footprints alert me to routes I might have missed.

      Thank you for leaving your tracks!
      Ben


  • xXDarkChildXx
    July 7, 2008

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    Very nice write. I really enjyoed it. =) Nice flow, and deffinitly deserved that gold trophy! You are an excellent writer! Keep on writing, until you can't write no more!


  • Arkbear gold member
    June 22, 2008

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    Hello there :)

    First off, welcome to AP......you have done well for yourself in the few days you have been aboard :)

     

    Loved your write....lots of pondering to go around for your Readers ~

     

    ....enjoyed your Authors' Profile as well ~

     

    I am the Host of the PO' Contests, I would like for you to bring your talents over to our contests when you have the time......however......>>>>

     

    We do not allow free verse or epic genre......we try to be direct and straight forward with your Tone & Theme.....and this is why I think you would fair well over there ~

     

    .....because........you are quite the opposite, and I would like to Challenge your Quill.....I see lots of talent, and I admire your abilty to draw Readers in :)

     

    I know AP can be a tad over-whelming at first, but once you get settled, drop by!

     

    Once again....nice write,

     

    .....good luck in the contest and God bless you!

     

    Bear ~

    • Peripatetic gold member
      June 22, 2008
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      Thanks, Bear. I will surely check out the contest. I am an admirer of free verse well done, and disappointed to find it so rarely. I attempt it once in a while, but even then I cheat by keeping a beat with regular feet. (Snicker) I know my strengths lie in conventions of form. I am grateful for the challenge of playing to those strengths.


  • Patpowers silver member
    June 22, 2008

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    This was a good solid work here Ben! You took us on one amazing journey. Good effort here and hope you liked my poetry!

    • Peripatetic gold member
      June 22, 2008
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      I see you caught me viewing. I remember you from the old P.C days.
      Thanks for the comment here, and I'll definitely be returning the favor.


  • Simply Simple
    June 22, 2008

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    I liked your take on the promt. It was very different. I was expecting something along the lines of "I am weird. I am me. I am different. Blah blah blah." Thank you for not entering that. This was amazing and very interesting. Thanks for thinking out side the box.

    • Peripatetic gold member
      June 22, 2008
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      I've noticed that social rebels and freethinkers seem to rebel and think freely along the same few lines, and if they are of a literary bent, they tend to quote the same old rebels and freethinkers. As the Preacher in Ecclesiastes says, "There is nothing new under the sun." I think it is good to choose your own path rather than have others direct you, simply "going with the flow," or doing something just to be different. It may turn out to be a well-trodden path, even a seeming highway, but at least you will have not let anyone else establish "normal" for you!
      I like the freedom of this contest. I am new here, but I am getting close to a point level where I can start paying back. I'm inclined to starting a contest that encourages ideas from a lot of directions as you have! Thanks!

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