I can see the lies in your eyes,
When you tell me you haven't been with her.
You smell of her perfume,
And those marks on your neck aren't from me.
I'll kiss you goodbye,
But close your eyes please,
So I can make myself believe it'll all be ok.
Author notes
"Close your eyes when you kiss me, So I don't see the lies that live there"
A contest entry
- Prompt 10 entries/ 30 to 40 words by mysticstorm.
475 points, ended June 25, 2008, 10 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What do you honestly think?
Comments
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Beautifully strong and full of eomtion in brevity...lies are something we all believe when we are in love, for we are blinded by them...thank you for sharing...
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This is fantastic! The last part stands out to me and goes back to the beginning line...it's easier to believe lies when you can't look into their eyes.
Bravo!
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short but has a very clear message. this is great hunni! good luck in the comp
love lae xxx
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this poem deff had a message going on here.short but i wish it was more meaningful like if the words flowed abit more.over all tho ur good. check my poems out and please comment
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