I just couldn't take it anymore,
I grabbed the midnight handle of the sharp knife,
knowing I shouldn't do it.
Yet still took the plunge.
My breathing becomes shallow,
as a pool of blood surrounds me,
a single tear rolling down my paling cheek.
"It was just to much,
I had had enough"
I murmured before closing my soft green eyes.
On my arm, snaking its way down to my wrist,
three simple words were visible,
'Don't Save Me'
The were crusted with scarlet coloring,
drenched in fresh flows that bled from my breast.
I am gone now, so don't try to save me.
Author notes
I just had an inspiration to write something like this. I dunno, first time I tried writing something that I wasn't in the mood to write.
A contest entry
- Cutters, Bleeders & Blood covered chocolate by Dead Embrace.
600 points, ended August 10, 2008, 17 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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thank you for entering your piece of writing and good luck for the contest
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wow what an outstanding effort, very chilling and sad very good and powerful, superb
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This is an amazing write..
I thought there were a bit too many adjetives for my liking, but I still liked it (:
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So sad
I have read many writes such as this and it is sad that their are young and older people who feel this lost it truly breaks my heart that they dont have anyone they can call their friends . You have [penned a sad one here honey and I so hope its just a write and not real to life
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I sometimes feel this way but I would never be able to do it...I have my siblings to look after and my few friends that rely on my help at times. But like I said in the authors note, I just wanted to try and write something that I wasn't in the mood to write. I wanted to challenge myself some.
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i totally understand the character. sometimes i want to take the plunge...
-kassie
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i like the part of dont save me... its almost like you know you're done with life and even if people tried to understand anything about u they culdnt n ur hopeless
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this is good!
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